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Title: war between life and death
Post by: samus the fighter on May 01, 2005, 10:10:04 PM

hi people  i have upgraded my stroyline etc this is how it goes...


 in a town called lomain the village of humans (if ur wondering why the village of humans its because monsters have ruled the world)
and one day the nasty queen Lakos and Sir Danga plan to make another war!!! world war 3 but against monsters! so they kidnap a child called Samuel he was only 8 when this happened so he was scared and sir Danga burnt his village to the ground nothing left! then 10 years later samuel lives with his adopted family no one knows wat happened to lakos or danga but rumours are saying they live in the world of demons so samuel and his best friend jamie are on a quest to know the truth of wat happened that day! the only thing they can do is kill the monster army


 perpare to fight massive monsters!!!!
 go into diffrent worlds!!! !!!!
 see amazing stroylines!!!
 o yes and save the world!!!!!!!!!!
 

they kidnapp samuel a pure hearted boy Lakos needs a pure hearted boy to start the war between life and death!

 save friends and meet new friends!!!!
 and get summons!!!! and hear this!!!
transforms!!!!!!!!






samuel

age 18

sex male

race human (the last of his kind)





jamie

age 18

sex male

race elf (the dark elfs son)







and more on the way .......... let the war begin only one will win!!!

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Post by: Deathreaper on May 01, 2005, 10:24:54 PM

so far so good sounds good.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 01, 2005, 10:34:39 PM

thanks ill keep it updated do u have a castle titleset? mate

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Post by: Deathreaper on May 01, 2005, 10:36:31 PM

Look for castle in the complete resources.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 01, 2005, 10:37:48 PM

kk

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 01, 2005, 10:46:27 PM

wahoooooo want me to send a screenie?

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Post by: Deathreaper on May 01, 2005, 10:49:17 PM

sure.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 01, 2005, 10:59:12 PM

dam it wont let me

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 01, 2005, 11:00:57 PM

arr im mad

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 01, 2005, 11:03:04 PM

well if this works ill be happy
if u can see it this is were it begins...

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 01, 2005, 11:13:39 PM

dam ill just tell u go on ur rpg maker are u using xp or 2003?

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 01, 2005, 11:17:45 PM

can someone speak please!!!!

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 01, 2005, 11:23:32 PM

can someone help me plz
 i need help with sound effects....

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 12:04:51 AM

the demo is ready people if u want to see it pm me

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Post by: Syntax on May 02, 2005, 12:05:39 AM

What do you call it when someone posts 6 times in a row?

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Post by: GhostClown on May 02, 2005, 12:09:57 AM

Your game looks pretty bad. Sorry, but it looks like you through it together in a few minutes.. :\  Also, DO NOT ever post six times in a row, unless you want your thread locked.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 12:10:37 AM

but no one answered me !!

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Post by: Syntax on May 02, 2005, 12:25:13 AM

well, you have to show them something to catch their attention!
more screenshots, more infomational character bios, more intence plot.
even a head. i dont know. just show them something they havent seen before.

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Post by: Rune_of_Punishment on May 02, 2005, 01:32:00 AM

It's also a good idea to edit you post. Dolt.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 12:25:19 PM

ok this is how my stroy begins its a demo of the intro u dont play it its just about the past how the war began between life and death i will send more screenies

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 12:28:33 PM

my demo intro

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 02, 2005, 12:35:42 PM

Decent screen.... but it makes no sense

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Post by: Sqoad on May 02, 2005, 12:37:44 PM

On page one on the screenshot. What is up with the dead character floating in space or whatever it is... And they re all the same... What has happened anyways?

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 12:41:01 PM

ok ill explain


 long long ago there was a evil queen named lakos she wanted to rule the world with monsters but 1 day samuels farther (the main char) stood up for the humans and then the queen took his wife samuels mom and took her to be headed then he saved her and then the queen took samuels farther and showed him the war between humans and monsters and he was mad and then the queen became one of the monsters to destroy the human race and thats just the intro of the past the beging takes 15 years back when samuel is grown up and seeks the truth about the war between life and death and him and his friend jamie go into the cave were samuels farther fought lakos and they get teleported into the past and they must kill lakos and save samuels dad from death and his morther o yea and kill lakos and stop the war when it began no one knows but they must find the truth between this war!!!!!


 o yea i must get rid of them thanks lol

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 12:45:42 PM

this is the part were samuels farther sees the war

 them 2 people are guards :)


 o yea im goin to add movies soon


 is sumthing wrong with u leon?


wats wrong?

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 02, 2005, 01:00:55 PM

AAAH! RTP! MY EYES ARE BURNING!

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Post by: Dragonium on May 02, 2005, 01:09:45 PM

Please don't use RTP, it makes the game look bad. Using the RTP sound effects is alright, but anything else is frowned upon. Please try and get the spelling and grammar right in the game (Or it looks bad), and please, make your story a bit more unique. It seems kinda cliche.

But good luck anyway.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 01:12:42 PM

ok im not do u have any sound effects like dieing sound laughing????

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Post by: Moosetroop11 on May 02, 2005, 02:10:18 PM

It looks okay... But did the queen say 'u' instead of 'you'?
Your characters speak in shorthand? 0_o...

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Post by: Nandez on May 02, 2005, 02:23:45 PM

Lakos sounds like Lavos travleing to the past well also sound slike antoher Chrono Trigger aspect and i'm pretty sure one of those characters has Chrono head on the body.But it doesn't sound like your ripping anything off I just noticed those and had to point them out.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 02:44:09 PM

i never played it i just made it up



 please give me credit im new at makin rpg games well my own

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 02:52:15 PM

i dont use you i use u its alot easyier anyway not all my chars say u its not all in short just that part


 fine i will change it to you


 did it :)

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Post by: Dragonium on May 02, 2005, 02:56:33 PM

The fact is, it may be easier, but at the end of the day, it looks bad. And you say that the rest of it uses "You"? I'd stick to "You" all the time, y'know.

BTW, not to be mean, but there are such things as puncuation and capital letters.

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Post by: Darkfox on May 02, 2005, 03:12:09 PM

Have her go "The w4r is l33t!" or "I rox0rz!" XD XD XD. Nah I'm just kidding, try to use appropriate spelling, not your regular chat shorthand spelling.

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Post by: gyrus on May 02, 2005, 04:13:11 PM

I don't want to sound synical but SPELL! Do NOT use chatroom language in a game! Its looks stupid!

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 04:15:11 PM

ok thanks for being honest

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 04:24:57 PM

ok now  back to the point does any1 know were to get sound effects

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Post by: Bart_Fatima on May 02, 2005, 04:45:07 PM

rpg maker data base

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Post by: Darkfox on May 02, 2005, 04:46:47 PM

Google! Look up horror sound effects.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 04:50:24 PM

ok

 o yea  is it ok to have ff songs in ur games?

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 05:05:58 PM

updated screenie

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 05:27:16 PM

battle screenie

(ill stop now)

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Post by: Dragonium on May 02, 2005, 05:33:56 PM

The RTP is making my brain bleed...

Sorry, but your first screen is waaaay too bare.

Second one is better.

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Post by: Darkfox on May 02, 2005, 05:34:34 PM

To come in! I have news!

O_o huh?

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 05:37:04 PM

i have updated it just please dont make bad coments im new at makin my own stuff :(

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Post by: Darkfox on May 02, 2005, 05:38:45 PM

The I needs to be capitalized. Just to let you know.

And is he sleeping in a library?! O_o... he must love books. Needs furniture though, unless he's a lousy decorator lol.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 06:09:56 PM

ok here is the upgraded room im adding sum cookin stuff

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Post by: Moosetroop11 on May 02, 2005, 06:13:47 PM

Ach noo change it back, now it looks like he got drunk the night before and destroyed his house.

Other than that, good :D

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 06:22:12 PM

lol nah his house is very old lol so thats why it looks bad!!!

 lol :)  :jumpin:

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Post by: karl3 on May 02, 2005, 08:45:37 PM

Sam i got a nice bad guy for your game his a battle mon

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 08:48:25 PM

kool that mite go well with lakos sum evil queen whos trying make war between humans and monsters :frag:  :smoke:

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Post by: karl3 on May 02, 2005, 08:49:52 PM

thanks i can give it blue hair if you want

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 08:52:17 PM

ill show u a screenie of the fight


 before ur thinkin this is a fast game its not!!! cause when u fight lakos its just the 2nd boss so it isnt the last 1

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 08:54:30 PM

this is the fight between lakos and the gang samuel and jamie :)

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Post by: karl3 on May 02, 2005, 08:59:51 PM

here you go

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 09:03:25 PM

kool it kinda doesnt suit her but i guess i can use it for her human form

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Post by: karl3 on May 02, 2005, 09:04:02 PM

kk ill make mons if you need ok just ask kk sam

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 09:06:51 PM

kk

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Post by: Rune_of_Punishment on May 02, 2005, 09:39:31 PM

I would never play this game. Ever.

Is it difficult to actually use punctuation and capitalization? Is it? Seriously, no one will play this game if they see crap like that. And your maps... deplorable.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 11:24:42 PM

go to hell besides im not even giving this game im asking for tips so shut up!


 anyway im new at this rpg making and i dont even care wat you think their is sum people who like it like the screenies sum dont sum do so shut up u nit!

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Post by: AsakuraHao2004 on May 02, 2005, 11:37:42 PM

Somehow, you just insulted yourself more than Rune. Your game sucks.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 11:39:25 PM

up urs gay
i didnt make this game so people like you!! to coment about the way it is etc i dont care what u have to say so shut up

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 02, 2005, 11:44:46 PM

Enough of that samus...
It's your 1st game right?

If it is, could some of you give samus a little slack?

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Post by: Rune_of_Punishment on May 02, 2005, 11:45:14 PM

Again, you can't make a valid point unless you have punctuation, otherwise your sentences seem to contradict the "point" you're trying to make. Keyword, TRYING. And you're not going to receive a lot of respect by saying stuff like that. Plus, I'm your elder. Respect your elders, child.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 11:45:48 PM

i no all this i just realli want to try hard!!!!


 plz give me me sum slack im new at this its my first game!!!

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Post by: Rune_of_Punishment on May 02, 2005, 11:48:18 PM

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Originally posted by Leon_1990
Enough of that samus...
It's your 1st game right?

If it is, could some of you give samus a little slack?

Um... no. I'm actually being extremely nice by not going so far in depth with what I'm saying. I don't care if his maps suck the big one or look like Eden, my biggest conern is his damn grammar and spelling. Even a newb/n00b can do that. So there's no excuse for horrible execution of the English language.

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 02, 2005, 11:49:02 PM

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Originally posted by samus the fighter
i no all this i just realli want to try hard!!!!


 plz give me me sum slack im new at this its my first game!!!

^ pay attention to this

and btw, samus, You should listen to rune of punishment about the punctuation, without it, your game looks really unprofessional.

@Rune_of_punishment: srry if tht offended you ^^''
It was really aimed at those NOT trying to help

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 11:53:02 PM

the truth is im not doing this for the public im just proving a point to darkfox i can make my own game but its realli hard work and yes i no i do put alot of text words in my rpg maker but i have now gone all over that i have changed it and yes your right rune... my maps suck thats because im new i bet you used to make mistakes so if thats the case i have no more to say but give me sum slack im new!!!!

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Post by: BlackIceAdept on May 02, 2005, 11:54:03 PM

I agree with Rune, you don't have to have perfect English but I saw over 10 errors in the 1st screneshot and thats really slopy... _sweat_

Edit: Also Btw Rune is a senior techancally so you should listen to him because before he changed his screen name he like over 2000 posts...

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Post by: Rune_of_Punishment on May 02, 2005, 11:55:28 PM

If you want to compare, my maps were good. Not extremely glamourours, but they were decent enough to hold good ground with more than half of the games made by RPG Maker. Now, my maps are probably in the top 5%. I cut no one slack. I hate quibbling people.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 02, 2005, 11:57:13 PM

yes i no about the first screenie i have made it better ill prove it!

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 03, 2005, 12:00:53 AM

Dnt get flustered samus....

heres a tip 4 u :
Don't leave wide, open spaces on ur maps.
and try 2 add a cieling at the top of the walls of houses and dungeons.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 12:01:05 AM

this has been cleaned up since the last part

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Post by: Rune_of_Punishment on May 03, 2005, 12:03:30 AM

Capitalize the first word of every sentence. That's not a hard concept to understand.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 12:06:50 AM

yep dam i dont no why i always miss out caps!!

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Post by: Linkforce on May 03, 2005, 12:37:50 AM

I don't want to discourage you more than everyone already has, but this is what i say.
When you make the dialouge, take your time and don't rush.  Be slow and percise if you have to.  Nobody is rushing you to finish this, so if you take your time, do each sentence carefully and slowly, you might do better than you think.  Also as for the maps, take time with that as well.  Do section by section.  Start at one corner and work your way down.  These are all tips though, I'm not trying to discourage or make you feel bad.  Good luck!:)

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Post by: AsakuraHao2004 on May 03, 2005, 12:48:09 AM

Imagine a shift key. Now imagine pressing it. Now press a key, but wait! Don't stop holding that shift key! Solution.

"Excellent."

My advice is to hire someone to transcript your game.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 06:59:15 AM

i will remake it and TAKE MY TIME!

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Post by: Deathreaper on May 03, 2005, 07:15:03 AM

well, all you need to do is edit some grammar mistakes and then it will be okay. Try using Microsoft Works Word Processor or windows word. good luck.

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Post by: karl3 on May 03, 2005, 09:01:42 AM

hi sam im at skool

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 10:13:03 AM

hi karl i have found a kool site for little charars for battle i tell u site  http://www.phylomortis.com/

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 11:00:31 AM

update on the start i have put more work into
it!!!

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 11:56:17 AM

my best room ever!!!!!!!!!!
is today people!!!!!
here it is!!!!!!!!! have edited the mistake sorry about that hole in the wall lol

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 03, 2005, 01:38:27 PM

Yeah, Ur gettin better ^^
change the chars and your sorted ;)

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 01:40:54 PM

ok this is my updated one

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 01:42:22 PM

ok i hope this works

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 03, 2005, 01:44:01 PM

lol, I neva meant that black chip 4 da walls it should be in with the floor tiles....

otherwise, its still, good^^

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Post by: Trueform Darkside on May 03, 2005, 03:57:07 PM

Heres the bridge and good job on the improvements!

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Post by: Trueform Darkside on May 03, 2005, 04:44:41 PM

here we go again. The attachments here

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Post by: Janne on May 03, 2005, 05:56:33 PM

This sucks, man. I'm sorry but this just sucks. At least you've learned how to write and the graphics are better. But still, horrible.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 06:17:04 PM

how can i make it beter

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Post by: Janne on May 03, 2005, 06:31:10 PM

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how can i make it beter

Btw, I saw the demo. My head almoust exploded. Why u didn't write correct in that? And, it didn't make any sense?? For Heaven's sake, first thing you have to do is to learn how to write.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 06:43:53 PM

!!!
the starters i have remade it !!!

 and i have write it right now! i was half asleep when doing the first 1


 i never even have a demo u fool!!!

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 03, 2005, 06:50:34 PM

Yo, Janne
I dont think he HAS a demo yet  _sweat_

U must be gettin mixed up dude :D

Btw, heres the title samus:

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Post by: Linkforce on May 03, 2005, 07:19:23 PM

nice job samus. :D  its lookin alot better....and y is every one bein an ***hole to samus?

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 03, 2005, 07:21:23 PM

sad remarks about the game Linkforce...
thts y, SOME of them are bein u no whats lol

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 07:21:53 PM

because they keep saying im a noob and they said a cant spell!!! im not very good on the keybroad :( so they are being mean!!!

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 03, 2005, 07:35:31 PM

well looks good to me:), i like the house screeny ( new ).

and ive got something to say to all that do not like this game,

well if you dont like this game, you can comment it, but stick with it.
and dont post anything useless, just comment, if you think its bad, then its best for samus the fighter, that you DO NOT post at all.
and if it IS usefull you can post, but elseway, dont post.

there...

now, i have you on msn, so if you need any charsets, ill be glad to help ^^

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Post by: Janne on May 03, 2005, 07:36:26 PM

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Originally posted by samus the fighter
!!!
the starters i have remade it !!!

 and i have write it right now! i was half asleep when doing the first 1


 i never even have a demo u fool!!!

You're the fool here, mate. I meant hte beginning video or sumthin' like that...My friend sent it to me. And of course, he got it from u.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 03, 2005, 07:37:43 PM

thanks man im gonna look carefuly when i do my rooms now and im goin to folo ur example

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Post by: Moosetroop11 on May 03, 2005, 07:38:03 PM

Here's an example map I made, using pretty much the same stuff you did. Note how the things are placed naturally. Think about how the char would 'live' in the house, what would be next to what, etc.

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 03, 2005, 07:43:32 PM

 

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You're the fool here, mate. I meant hte beginning video or sumthin' like that...My friend sent it to me. And of course, he got it from u.

janne! not to do harshe to you, but did you even read what i just sayd?

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Post by: Janne on May 03, 2005, 07:50:41 PM

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You're the fool here, mate. I meant hte beginning video or sumthin' like that...My friend sent it to me. And of course, he got it from u.

janne! not to do harshe to you, but did you even read what i just sayd?

Man, I was writing that the same time as u.

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 03, 2005, 07:51:19 PM

oh ok XD

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Post by: AsakuraHao2004 on May 03, 2005, 08:09:06 PM

Moosetroop, that is the rightest way to use a chipset ever.

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 03, 2005, 08:11:05 PM

good to MT11, bad to STF.

so bassicaly pointless, a well XD

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Post by: karl3 on May 03, 2005, 08:54:20 PM

sam your games are getting much better im glad i was able to teach you how to make intro's (actually why am i glad i did it cuz u live next to me lol)  (friends for life sam)

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 03, 2005, 08:59:46 PM

you live next door to him? gr8 you can help him out^^

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Post by: karl3 on May 03, 2005, 09:01:18 PM

i always do. i always help to my fullest potential

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Post by: Rune_of_Punishment on May 03, 2005, 09:47:32 PM

I'm a cynical bastard, but I have the right. Improvements are needed, and without actually stating it and coating it with praise IS NOT HOW YOU DO IT. There are critics in this world, and critics help make things better. Like myself, I'm very critical when it comes to plot development and grammatical problems. I'm not perfect with grammar, but I'm really good with it.

Samus... while you did the start the sentences off with capital letters, you still didn't capitalize everything that needed to be capitalized. "I" needs to be capitalized, and commas need to come after prepositional phrases that are four words or longer. Your English for crying out loud.

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Post by: Syntax on May 03, 2005, 11:08:42 PM

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Originally posted by samus the fighter
ok ill explain


 long long ago there was a evil queen named lakos she wanted to rule the world with monsters but 1 day samuels farther (the main char) stood up for the humans and then the queen took his wife samuels mom and took her to be headed then he saved her and then the queen took samuels farther and showed him the war between humans and monsters and he was mad and then the queen became one of the monsters to destroy the human race and thats just the intro of the past the beging takes 15 years back when samuel is grown up and seeks the truth about the war between life and death and him and his friend jamie go into the cave were samuels farther fought lakos and they get teleported into the past and they must kill lakos and save samuels dad from death and his morther o yea and kill lakos and stop the war when it began no one knows but they must find the truth between this war!!!!!


 o yea i must get rid of them thanks lol

Wow!!! Thats one big sentance. Its really important that your game makes sence, and that we can understand what your saying.

Your game is really doing progress, good job. I hope its even better the next time I come and see your thread again.

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Post by: Kardin on May 04, 2005, 02:07:15 AM

Alrighty then, this game has indeed improved since the first screen, HOWEVER, there it still lots of room for improvement. The writing: You're still missing capitals. You should have learned way back in like, the first grade that when you're saying I (as in "I eat cheese") you must ALWAYS USE A CAPITAL 'I', EVEN IF IT'S THE LAST WORD IN A SENTENCE.
Two: Names. They too must have a capital at the beginning.
Three: Literacy. Use descriptive and proper punctuation. When you can't see a character's facial expressions or hear their voice, the text must do so instead. Compare:
coal lukt in2 her dep brwm i's and sed: i luv u

OR:
Coal looked softly into her deep brown eyes. He took a breath wispered: "I love you."

Which has more impact? The answer is the second one. NOW, more on punctuation:

Compare:
ha ha ha. you mortal fools. im cant b difeated do you not c hey is sumething burning.

om im on fire

OR:
"BWA HA HA! You mortal fools! I cannot be defeated! Do you not see that- hey... is something burning?

OH MY GOD I'M ON FIRE!"

The second one had a lot more feeling to it. Also, every detail counts. For instance, never write 'o' instead of 'oh' or 'yah/ya/yea' instead of 'yeah'.

And for you hoidy-toidy anti-RTPers, custom sprites aren't for everyone. Some don't have the skill, or the proper programs. The new version of my game doesn't have RTP, but spriting is a lot of work. Leave the guy alone and let him use all the RTP he wants, it just means he's not a great spriter.

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Post by: Rune_of_Punishment on May 04, 2005, 02:27:41 AM

Um... I kind of established that... _sweat_

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Post by: Syntax on May 04, 2005, 02:28:24 AM

Yeah, he does have a point.
It took me longer to read/understand
coal lukt in2 her dep brwm i's and sed: i luv u
than
Coal looked softly into her deep brown eyes. He took a breath wispered: "I love you."

If you dont fix your writing, it wont matter if you use sexy graphics.

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Post by: PeRKLE on May 04, 2005, 07:44:58 AM

I think that the game needs improvement (as probably everyone here too), but if you have problems with spelling and grammatics, you can always send the game to me and I can make a list of possible writing errors and then send the list to you (I have pretty good English, I have studied it for 10 years). Tell if it's okay.

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Post by: Syntax on May 04, 2005, 08:47:57 AM

10 years? you mean school right.
then me it would be 11 years XD

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Post by: karl3 on May 04, 2005, 08:58:21 AM

dont moan at sam he aint been to school for 2 years

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Post by: PeRKLE on May 04, 2005, 09:30:17 AM

I started it in kindergarden :D I mean English. Karl you mean Samus haven't been in school?

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Post by: karl3 on May 04, 2005, 09:31:30 AM

he has not been to school for three years

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Post by: PeRKLE on May 04, 2005, 09:33:17 AM

Okay, then I understand those errors and I'm glad if I could help some way.

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Post by: Syntax on May 04, 2005, 09:37:39 AM

I just droped out in january. I might go back in september.

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Post by: karl3 on May 04, 2005, 10:01:28 AM

he is only 14

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 04, 2005, 11:17:31 AM

i have changed the storyline u should read the first thread more man..... besides i have done the mistake errors (spelling etc) i was doing this game at 1 o cloak man so i was sleepy



hi people i have upgraded my stroyline etc this is how it goes...


in a town called lomain the village of humans (if ur wondering why the village of humans its because monsters have ruled the world)
and one day the nasty queen Lakos and Sir Danga plan to make another war!!! world war 3 but against monsters! so they kidnap a child called Samuel he was only 8 when this happened so he was scared and sir Danga burnt his village to the ground nothing left! then 10 years later samuel lives with his adopted family no one knows wat happened to lakos or danga but rumours are saying they live in the world of demons so samuel and his best friend jamie are on a quest to know the truth of wat happened that day! the only thing they can do is kill the monster army


perpare to fight massive monsters!!!!
go into diffrent worlds!!! !!!!
see amazing stroylines!!!
o yes and save the world!!!!!!!!!!


they kidnapp samuel a pure hearted boy Lakos needs a pure hearted boy to start the war between life and death!

save friends and meet new friends!!!!
and get summons!!!! and hear this!!!
transforms!!!!!!!!






samuel

age 18

sex male

race human (the last of his kind)





jamie

age 18

sex male

race elf (the dark elfs son)







and more on the way .......... let the war begin only one will win!!!

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Post by: Rune_of_Punishment on May 04, 2005, 11:17:52 AM

Why doesn't your story fit, Karl? You said he hasn't been in school for 2 years, then later you say he hasn't been in school for 3. Which is it? And don't bring age into this. I was good with grammar when I was 10.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 04, 2005, 11:24:09 AM

listen i aint been to school because i had some personal probelms so i left no big deal.... i still learn besides this has nothing to do with school etc so lets just get on with rpg making read this!!!



hi people i have upgraded my stroyline etc this is how it goes...


in a town called lomain the village of humans (if ur wondering why the village of humans its because monsters have ruled the world)
and one day the nasty queen Lakos and Sir Danga plan to make another war!!! world war 3 but against monsters! so they kidnap a child called Samuel he was only 8 when this happened so he was scared and sir Danga burnt his village to the ground nothing left! then 10 years later samuel lives with his adopted family no one knows wat happened to lakos or danga but rumours are saying they live in the world of demons so samuel and his best friend jamie are on a quest to know the truth of wat happened that day! the only thing they can do is kill the monster army


perpare to fight massive monsters!!!!
go into diffrent worlds!!! !!!!
see amazing stroylines!!!
o yes and save the world!!!!!!!!!!


they kidnapp samuel a pure hearted boy Lakos needs a pure hearted boy to start the war between life and death!

save friends and meet new friends!!!!
and get summons!!!! and hear this!!!
transforms!!!!!!!!






samuel

age 18

sex male

race human (the last of his kind)

he has always been a shy boy intil now!
his main quest in life is to have a family and stop the war!
soliders are coming but wait... these arent human!!!
they are monsters!!!!!!!!!!!!!
so Samuels job is to protect his adopted family
from war



jamie

age 18

sex male

race elf (the dark elfs son)

not alot is known about this person except he uses a battle axe
called the death bringer his farther is the dark elf king but jamie never wanted to become a prince he wanted to save his best friend Samuel jamie has the power to transform into a dark elf like his farther


 yalo

age 24

sex female

race elf

this women has the power to summon monsters
she is one of the royal armys wepaon to destroy the village but samuel meets this women and they get atracted to each other and become very good friends but this wont stop lakos plan or will it?


dal

age 6

sex male

race dawf

this boy is very good at throwing axes at monsters so we should see alot of good fighting with this chara Jamies cousin dawf dal.




lakos

age unkown

 sex female

race deathless elf queen

playerable chara no

this is the probelm of the war the queen of deathless castle wants to start a war between life and her death army
Samuel is the only one who can stop this maddness or can he?




sir Danga

age unknown

sex male

race human

playerable chara no

this is lakos bodyguard the master behind the burning village the killer of Samuels family Danga is a human the only one to join lakos he has the power to control weather and dead people

this is just the begining of pain!!! perpare for the war between life and death!

whoever wins rules the world........


 comin soon a release date

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 04, 2005, 11:38:58 AM

battle fight!

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 04, 2005, 11:40:14 AM

thats pretty cool :jumpin:

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Post by: Syntax on May 04, 2005, 12:04:53 PM

At least he has a large amount of potential...

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 04, 2005, 12:12:45 PM

^^ THE BEST CHARS IN THE WORLD!!! lol

Glad to see how your gettin on Samus ;) , the storylines gettin better, and now I know why they kidnapped samuel :D

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 04, 2005, 12:15:35 PM

whats wrong with you? ^o) :P

lol sorry, but you where shouting, dont shout! god, whe understand if you say it normal too, ooooh im acting moddy XD

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 04, 2005, 12:24:31 PM

in a town called lomain the village of humans (if ur wondering why the village of humans its because monsters have ruled the world)
and one day the nasty queen Lakos and Sir Danga plan to make another war!!! world war 3 but against monsters! so they kidnap a child called Samuel he was only 8 when this happened so he was scared and sir Danga burnt his village to the ground nothing left! then 10 years later samuel lives with his adopted family no one knows wat happened to lakos or danga but rumours are saying they live in the world of demons so samuel and his best friend jamie are on a quest to know the truth of wat happened that day! the only thing they can do is kill the monster army


perpare to fight massive monsters!!!!
go into diffrent worlds!!! !!!!
see amazing stroylines!!!
o yes and save the world!!!!!!!!!!


they kidnapp samuel a pure hearted boy Lakos needs a pure hearted boy to start the war between life and death!

save friends and meet new friends!!!!
and get summons!!!! and hear this!!!
transforms!!!!!!!!






samuel

age 18

sex male

race human (the last of his kind)

he has always been a shy boy intil now!
his main quest in life is to have a family and stop the war!
soliders are coming but wait... these arent human!!!
they are monsters!!!!!!!!!!!!!
so Samuels job is to protect his adopted family
from war



jamie

age 18

sex male

race elf (the dark elfs son)

not alot is known about this person except he uses a battle axe
called the death bringer his farther is the dark elf king but jamie never wanted to become a prince he wanted to save his best friend Samuel jamie has the power to transform into a dark elf like his farther


yalo

age 24

sex female

race elf

this women has the power to summon monsters
she is one of the royal armys wepaon to destroy the village but samuel meets this women and they get atracted to each other and become very good friends but this wont stop lakos plan or will it?


dal

age 6

sex male

race dawf

this boy is very good at throwing axes at monsters so we should see alot of good fighting with this chara Jamies cousin dawf dal.




lakos

age unkown

sex female

race deathless elf queen

playerable chara no

this is the probelm of the war the queen of deathless castle wants to start a war between life and her death army
Samuel is the only one who can stop this maddness or can he?




sir Danga

age unknown

sex male

race human

playerable chara no

this is lakos bodyguard the master behind the burning village the killer of Samuels family Danga is a human the only one to join lakos he has the power to control weather and dead people

this is just the begining of pain!!! perpare for the war between life and death!

whoever wins rules the world........


comin soon a release date

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 04, 2005, 12:26:29 PM

i smell improvement here :), lol, but just dont post the story over and over, it gets annoying, just post the updates and all;)

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 04, 2005, 12:36:27 PM

-_-'' MMB, ur turnin in2 a mod lol
Stop it! lol

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 04, 2005, 12:42:23 PM

i would relaxe if i where you leon1990.

woops that whas moddy again XD XD XD

anyway ill stop

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Post by: PeRKLE on May 04, 2005, 12:45:21 PM

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Originally posted by karl3
he is only 14

What has this to do with anything?

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Post by: Janne on May 04, 2005, 01:10:15 PM

Your Samuel here has the same b-char as the Samuel of my game.
Cool. Or not. Whatever.

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 04, 2005, 01:14:13 PM

lol? XD

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 04, 2005, 01:36:43 PM

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Your Samuel here has the same b-char as the Samuel of my game.
Cool. Or not. Whatever.

Whoah, in my game, I use that char for a guy called Conrad lol

*If you Mod this MMB, I swear I'll hunt u down  >:  lol*
Now, if you can excuse me MMB, my brother just used my first name..... *Sound of gun loading*

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 04, 2005, 01:41:43 PM

well, im not gonna mod that, because its not worth modding.

 

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my brother just used my first name

you mean scott right? oh crap... *runs*

back to topic now.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 04, 2005, 02:11:58 PM

u enter the temple of summons...... (rtp was only for this part lmao the real chara is gonna be updated : )

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 04, 2005, 02:13:48 PM

Thts creen shots, actually...quite good ^^

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 04, 2005, 02:16:37 PM

yeah, but....the back two pillars arent really standing there quite right...put them further from the big uplifted part...

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 04, 2005, 02:22:45 PM

done it : ) this is were the skill summon comes in o yes and u meet yalo :P

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Post by: Janne on May 04, 2005, 02:26:20 PM

Well, doesn't look too bad....Much of improvement since the first screenshots.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 04, 2005, 02:27:25 PM

thanks i have learnt since then thanks janne i will keep improving my skills

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 04, 2005, 02:30:33 PM

heres teh battlechar edit sam, the bottom 2 poses are his idle ones ;)

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Post by: karl3 on May 04, 2005, 03:11:59 PM

my reason is called a speeling mistake pretty obvious aint it and its been 2 years not 3

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 04, 2005, 03:16:24 PM

its been 2 now and i made mistakes because i was doing my first game at 1 o cloak (not a good idea so please dont try this)

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Post by: Syntax on May 04, 2005, 03:26:26 PM

Like I said. Potential!
Great Potential!
Keep it up...

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 04, 2005, 04:15:35 PM

yea i will thanks : )

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Post by: Syntax on May 04, 2005, 06:19:30 PM

LOL Now hes blending in!
this is the best N00B eva!

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 04, 2005, 08:41:48 PM

i hope thats a coment and not a insult.....

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 05, 2005, 10:22:54 AM

upgraded house

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 05, 2005, 10:27:16 AM

it looks the same to me, why dont u put those black tiles over the top of the front wall ;)

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 05, 2005, 10:46:24 AM

yeah!!:)

 

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this is the best N00B eva!

ROFL!! LMAO!!!

 

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i hope thats a coment and not a insult.....

it whas a compliment!
GOD WHATS WRONG WITH ME O_o, ussualy just me XD

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 05, 2005, 10:49:09 AM

ur gettin hyper again MMB....
u need 2 calm down :D

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 05, 2005, 10:54:43 AM

lol try some lessons on breathing slow..... slow... slow.... dum dum dum done!!!!!!


:P

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 05, 2005, 10:58:21 AM

lol gd 1 sam ^^
btw, does Karl still want a title?

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 05, 2005, 11:08:41 AM

woops sorry guys, but when i readed that line from syntax, :p, good god. a well...

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Post by: Syntax on May 05, 2005, 11:12:28 AM

Sorry I couldnt help myself! hes accualy putting a name for himself and improving by the minute... SECOND accualy... not minutes! SECONDS!!!

Ah yeah and sice sig MMB :p

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 05, 2005, 11:17:59 AM

haahaa.

lol, i wonder who made it :p

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Post by: Syntax on May 05, 2005, 11:36:35 AM

me.. perhaps?
so sam did you make any new maps you could show us?

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 05, 2005, 11:40:17 AM

whaoh, I'm an idiot,so i just realised
THTS A SWEET CAR SYNTAX!

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 05, 2005, 11:57:12 AM

yeah, we wanna see sum more maps:D

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Post by: Syntax on May 05, 2005, 12:06:24 PM

Thanks...
I modified a stock car made it look suiped up :p

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 05, 2005, 12:09:00 PM

ur good lol

we want screenies ^^

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 05, 2005, 12:10:15 PM

dont think STF is paying attention -_-" XD

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 05, 2005, 01:05:30 PM

he does leon

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 05, 2005, 01:08:56 PM

ok, so post some new screens :)

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Post by: Syntax on May 05, 2005, 01:15:50 PM

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he does leon

LOL XD

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 05, 2005, 01:34:26 PM

this is a screenie :P

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Post by: mind-master: brain(mmb) on May 05, 2005, 01:50:01 PM

 

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he does leon

wait a second...huh?...oh crap! HAHAA!!!

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 05, 2005, 02:31:20 PM

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he does leon

wait a second...huh?...oh crap! HAHAA!!!

lol - nice screen sam

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Post by: karl3 on May 05, 2005, 04:03:27 PM

 

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DOES KARL STILL WANT THE TITILE

 YES PLZZZ

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Post by: Syntax on May 05, 2005, 05:28:40 PM

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Originally posted by karl3

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DOES KARL STILL WANT THE TITILE

 YES PLZZZ

Shouldnt this have been posted in karl's thread?

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Post by: karl3 on May 05, 2005, 05:50:37 PM

thats a very good point syntax

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 05, 2005, 06:35:42 PM

I wrote that here cos karl wasnt on, plus sam would have known

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Post by: Syntax on May 05, 2005, 07:31:27 PM

Another good point

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Post by: karl3 on May 05, 2005, 07:45:38 PM

yes true
read my 2 new posts for the intro story for my game

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Post by: Syntax on May 05, 2005, 08:18:22 PM

Ok.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 05, 2005, 08:22:18 PM

no new updates yet people :(

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Post by: Syntax on May 06, 2005, 01:33:20 AM

Il just keep checking then.

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Post by: Kardin on May 06, 2005, 01:38:50 AM

I am amazed. Truly astounded. You are quite possibly one of the fastest learners I have ever met. Congradulations! I wish you only the best of luck on this game.

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Post by: Syntax on May 06, 2005, 02:04:50 AM

Quote: You are quite possibly one of the fastest learners I have ever met.

I must agree with this guy. In a matter of a day or two, he came from noob/unrespected to not bad/cool/fairly respected

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 06, 2005, 11:02:11 AM

ok people this is how lakos became the evil queen the past....

 flashback of the past!!!!!

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Post by: Trueform Darkside on May 06, 2005, 12:29:39 PM

hey sam,
Great improvement, you're doing awesome. If you need any help with anything, don't hesitate to ask. Keep the cool screenshots and story updates a'comin!

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 06, 2005, 12:51:29 PM

as Syntax said, well done!

and good screen sam, but it could do with a little more detail though, and, (I hate to say this :( ) but the grammars still messed up , there ya go, i said it :(

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 06, 2005, 01:48:55 PM

poooo... hmmmm well i havent got far so i suppose ill look into the grammer and doesnt matter least ur honest

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 06, 2005, 02:03:28 PM

grammer etc updated!!!!!


 hi i need a town titleset can anyone help me please?

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 06, 2005, 02:43:29 PM

thats it ;)

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 06, 2005, 02:51:57 PM

leon i need i cant make towns so im goin to use rtp ones cant make towns using titlesets :(

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 06, 2005, 02:59:46 PM

dnt worry, I'll search u some ok ;) Do you need FF4,5 & 6 styled maps?

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 06, 2005, 03:03:06 PM

ff5 is my fav so !!! yea!!!!!!!!!!! ff5!!!!!!!!! hehehehe



 hyper today people.. :jumpin:

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Post by: Dragonium on May 06, 2005, 03:38:01 PM

Ehehehe. Cool.

And I've seen many FF5 towns around. Not on Phylomortis, but I've seen 'em somewhere. I'll look around.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 07, 2005, 08:05:52 AM

no new updates yet people ill keep you posted :)

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 07, 2005, 12:30:29 PM

update!!! first fight with sir Danga!!!! and summon command

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Post by: Janne on May 07, 2005, 12:51:17 PM

Cool.

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 07, 2005, 04:30:36 PM

no new updates today... ill keep you posted

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Post by: Leon_1990 on May 07, 2005, 04:36:29 PM

lol nice screen ;)

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 07, 2005, 04:58:50 PM

thanks man more will come soon

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 07, 2005, 08:14:57 PM

this is castle is still in making this is were we go face to face with Jamies farther!!!

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Post by: Syntax on May 07, 2005, 08:18:12 PM

Nice, but since when does castles have stars in the inside?

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Post by: samus the fighter on May 07, 2005, 08:21:17 PM

good question the king has magic powers and his flying his castle ( you get taken to jail after this anyay)   :)

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Post by: Syntax on May 07, 2005, 08:37:15 PM

haha XD

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Post by: karl3 on May 09, 2005, 09:44:53 AM

nice gaqme sam me wana play1 i no ill come to your housae after skool k

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Post by: samus the fighter on November 20, 2005, 12:07:31 AM

This game may died...But the begining is near...


  _sweat_

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Post by: Leon_1990 on November 20, 2005, 12:21:51 AM

Ah! a grand comeback I see here...
this could be interesting...

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Post by: samus the fighter on November 20, 2005, 12:36:29 AM

And yes leon your right Samus has not died!
 and nor this will game this is my first game now i think it should be bought it back now i have improved alot and Leon you know i have from childs quest.

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Post by: Leon_1990 on November 20, 2005, 12:37:40 AM

Haha yeah , brings a tear to my eye really...

Especially looking back on this thread ^_^

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Post by: Meiscool-2 on November 20, 2005, 01:38:33 AM

Seems like a major kick, but whatever. It's good that you're sticking with a game and not completly restarting, that shows devotion.

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Post by: Leon_1990 on November 20, 2005, 04:32:21 PM

Well, sam's the Topic's Author...
so he's allowed to kick it...well, its called a bump in this case...

anyways,  Wheres the info sam?!