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Off-Topic => Creative arts => Topic started by: Linkforce on January 30, 2006, 04:31:43 AM

Title: Lyrics from my band
Post by: Linkforce on January 30, 2006, 04:31:43 AM

Well, there are lyrtics from songs I came up with.  I'd like some views and opinions on them.  ^^'  Just please don't be a n00b and say they horribly suck and I should go away.  XD


Loneliest Day


Time goes by, hours go so fast,
the more I think of it the longer it lasts.
This emptyness inside, killing me slowly,
I try to ignore it, but it's always inside me.
I'm stuck at the fork, with no clue in sight,
wish I could end it, and just say good night.

   Stay up and fall, stay down and feel all alone,
   my decision is all that I have.
   When I can go, when I can go I can show you,
   all my feelings I have locked inside.
   Over and all, there is no place for you now,
   locked the doors and threw out my own key.

When I come home, there won't be a place for you anymore.
I've locked all the doors.
When I set free, I will be stronger then before,
and I've locked all the doors to myself.
When I see all, all of the things that went wrong,
I can finally open the door.

   Stay up and fall, stay down and feel all alone,
   my decision is all that I have.
   When I can go, when I can go I can show you,
   all my feelings I have locked inside.
   Over and all, there is no place for you now,
   locked the doors and threw out my own key.

All in all, I never thought for you very much,
not after you showed me how you can get.
No more sadness for me, I'm not the one to blame.
I've locked all the doors.
Go and run, run off with the one you adore,
when you come home, there won't be a place for you anymore.


   (Soft)
   Stay up and fall, stay down and feel all alone,
   my decision is all that I have.
   When I can go, when I can go I can show you,
   all my feelings I have locked inside.
   Over and all, there is no place for you now,
   locked the doors and threw out my own key.


   Stay up and fall, stay down and feel all alone,
   my decision is all that I have.
   When I can go, when I can go I can show you,
   all my feelings I have locked inside.
   Over and all, there is no place for you now,
   locked the doors and threw out my own key.

I'll post more as I make them.  :)

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Post by: ZeroKirbyX on January 30, 2006, 04:33:19 AM

You know my opinion on em.  ;)

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Post by: Linkforce on January 30, 2006, 04:34:38 AM

Lol, yes I do.  ;)

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Post by: MrMister on January 30, 2006, 05:59:59 AM

I swear to God if there is a spoken word part in that I will cut your eyes out

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Post by: carmen on January 30, 2006, 08:56:22 AM

w00t! not bad I'd like to hear it though

I write too. Mines alil bit less....direct.


[PBG]

Take my mothers pride
and leave it on the porch outside
cuase it's gravy
in my pie

and i don't know if I'm ever coming home

lift my fathers guns
and hang them out in the sun to dry
cuase it's bullets
on my mind

And I don't know if I'm ever coming home
And  I don't know if I'm ever

My penguins bride
she left my heart  out in the dirt
cause it's grav'ty
that pulls the tide

And I don't knwo if I'm ever coming home
and I don't know If I'm ever

*wasting all your life away
on things you can't afford
misusing all the words you say
I cannot take no more*

look at everyone
and look at everything
that they've become
cause it's saline
that they've shunned

And I don't know if I'm ever coming home
And  I don't know if I'm ever

De-hymenize
and reorganize
between your thighs
cuase it's cherries
on the line

And I don't know if I'm ever coming home
And  I don't know if I'm ever

*wasting all your life away
on things you can't afford
misusing all the words you say
I cannot take no more*

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Post by: Linkforce on January 30, 2006, 10:33:53 PM

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Originally posted by carmen
w00t! not bad I'd like to hear it though

I write too. Mines alil bit less....direct.


[PBG]

Take my mothers pride
and leave it on the porch outside
cuase it's gravy
in my pie

and i don't know if I'm ever coming home

lift my fathers guns
and hang them out in the sun to dry
cuase it's bullets
on my mind

And I don't know if I'm ever coming home
And  I don't know if I'm ever

My penguins bride
she left my heart  out in the dirt
cause it's grav'ty
that pulls the tide

And I don't knwo if I'm ever coming home
and I don't know If I'm ever

*wasting all your life away
on things you can't afford
misusing all the words you say
I cannot take no more*

look at everyone
and look at everything
that they've become
cause it's saline
that they've shunned

And I don't know if I'm ever coming home
And  I don't know if I'm ever

De-hymenize
and reorganize
between your thighs
cuase it's cherries
on the line

And I don't know if I'm ever coming home
And  I don't know if I'm ever

*wasting all your life away
on things you can't afford
misusing all the words you say
I cannot take no more*

Thanks carmen, but this thread is for my songs only...... _sweat_

And Mrmister...what are you talking about?

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Post by: carmen on January 30, 2006, 10:39:06 PM

lol I was just giving you an example.

Mr.Mister was referring to the sappiness of the song,
toying with the idea that it's of a certain genre that speaks durring the song.

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Post by: MrMister on January 30, 2006, 10:39:39 PM

De-hymenize
and reorganize
between your thighs
cuase it's cherries
on the line


UGH UGH UGH that is WEIRD

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Post by: Meiscool-2 on January 30, 2006, 10:42:45 PM

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Originally posted by MrMister
De-hymenize
and reorganize
between your thighs
cuase it's cherries
on the line


UGH UGH UGH that is WEIRD

I smell a filler.

Well, I've never been one that's good to rate lyrics untill I hear the beat that they are actually supposed to be sang at... so yeah.

Title: New Song
Post by: Linkforce on January 31, 2006, 12:37:22 AM

Free from my Heart



Take me away, to your arms and I'll stay there all day.
You were there for me then, but now, hey,
where's the love in your eyes and ill never live
life again, unless you are the one to free me.

Way back when, we were one and the same,
but our hearts were too young, too lame.
And my thoughts, they were with you,
but nothing could undo, the foolish mistake that I made.

   So be free from my heart, and be free in my mind,
   I'm so sorry, I've got to leave you behind.
   And show me the way, to the Loneliest Day,
   and let my heart stop and begin to decay.
   Just the touch of your lips is the one thing I've wanted,
   but since that late day, all my thoughts have been haunted, by you.

I think of the times, when I'm right next to you,
and though memories fade, I pray that they will too.
What is the point of holding on,to this un-reality,
a lost cause, a last breath, and my final beat.

This is my pleading, this is my kneeling,
and this is the dawning of my insanity.

   So be free from my heart, and be free in my mind,
   I'm so sorry, I've got to leave you behind.
   And show me the way, to the Loneliest Day,
   and let my heart stop and begin to decay.
   Just the touch of your lips is the one thing I've wanted,
   but since that late day, all my thoughts have been haunted, by you.

And my thoughts were a waist,
and my senses, no taste,
and the stars in the sky couldn't keep me away.
So please, please, please, stay away!

I don't want to feel, feel this pain in my heart anymore!
So shut your face, and stay the hell away,
let me die in this obsession everday!

   So be free from my heart, and be free in my mind,
   I'm so sorry, I've got to leave you behind.
   And show me the way, to the Loneliest Day,
   and let my heart stop and begin to decay.
   Just the touch of your lips is the one thing I've wanted,
   but since that late day, all my thoughts have been haunted, by you.


This one's a bit intense...but it has meaning.  Lol, hopefully this is more to everyones liking.  lol

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Post by: Spike21 on January 31, 2006, 01:39:17 AM

i have to hear it i don't rate lyrics i am looking foward to hear it.

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Post by: blackskullwarlock on January 31, 2006, 01:48:26 AM

I rate lyrics when I hear them with the music and how hard they are to sing. The meaning of the lyrics is just a detail for me.

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Post by: carmen on January 31, 2006, 02:28:03 AM

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Originally posted by MrMister
De-hymenize
and reorganize
between your thighs
cuase it's cherries
on the line


UGH UGH UGH that is WEIRD

>.<

Thats one of my favorite lines.

the songs so pretty though. So it sounds funny.

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Post by: MrMister on January 31, 2006, 03:19:35 AM

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Originally posted by carmen

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Originally posted by MrMister De-hymenize and reorganize between your thighs cuase it's cherries on the line UGH UGH UGH that is WEIRD

>.<

Thats one of my favorite lines.

the songs so pretty though. So it sounds funny.

HOHOHO. I laugh at your unholy lyrics.

Okay.. all these lyrics don't really mean anything to me yet.
I guess you haven't recorded anything yet, considering you haven't even come with a name yet... but yes, post some of that stuff when you do

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Post by: Linkforce on January 31, 2006, 03:46:11 AM

I do have a name for my band.  And members and such.  We're going to record these pretty soon.  So once we do, I'll post 'em here.

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Post by: MrMister on January 31, 2006, 04:17:30 AM

Cool beans, man.
Can't wait to hear some.
How long you been playing together?