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Off-Topic => Creative arts => Topic started by: Ephiam on August 03, 2006, 04:42:56 PM

Title: A small comic I made.
Post by: Ephiam on August 03, 2006, 04:42:56 PM

 src="http://img125.imageshack.us/img125/724/img003wi9.th.jpg" width="116" height="165" [url]alt="http://img125.imageshack.us/img125/724/img003wi9.th.jpg" border=0> (http://img125.imageshack.us/my.php?image=img003wi9.jpg)



Well, I know it's not the BEST artwork in the world.  However,  thought that I would try doing something different for a change.  I will have the second page up...maybe by...tomorrow sometime.  But for now, I'll just give the dialouge that occured during the little comic.


-------------------------------------1st Page script. (Since it was a tad messy)-----------------------
Man:  "There seems to be no word from him yet, sir!"

Man with glasses: "Keep trying...He is sure to answer. "

Man with glasses: "But then again....we still have hold of that little distraction...don't we?"
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Voice: "What distraction...?"

Man: "OH!, there you are!"

Long-haired man: ...
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Man with glasses: "Ah, Lance! we were just talking about you!"
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Lance: " And what for?"

Man with glasses: " Oh! nothing much....it's only a small job..."

Man with glasses: "You should be done rather quickly...."
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Well,  I'm all open for opinion's and comment's if anyone has any.  Thank's.



EDIT: Hmm...i can't seem to get the image showing.  Well..just click on the link at the very top of this post to see it.

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Post by: Almeidaboo on August 03, 2006, 05:32:39 PM

Ah...Thing is...I can´t really see stuff. I can´t tell what's what and the scenario is all mixed with the characters and I can´t see stuff.

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Post by: Moosetroop11 on August 03, 2006, 06:01:07 PM

My advice would be to use less lines and do bold, stylised characters in a regular comic. This helps with clarity, recognition and drawing speed.

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Post by: Ephiam on August 03, 2006, 06:09:02 PM

Thanks.  I'm trying my best to make it not so realish looking and have a cartoony feel.  However, that seems to be turning out rather bad :|.  Anywhoo...I'm trying to 'tidy' thing's up with the second page.....trying to make it more followable and readable.

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Post by: Dragoon de Sol on August 03, 2006, 06:12:22 PM

Due to imageshack resizing the comic, I am unable to see much of the comments.

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Post by: Almeidaboo on August 03, 2006, 06:21:17 PM

And make the sequence of frames more understandable too...

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Post by: Ephiam on August 03, 2006, 06:29:53 PM

Thank's for the comment's though =D  At least these ones are helpfull and half-decent.  It's hard to continue whenno one seems to like what you doin =(

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Post by: Ephiam on August 03, 2006, 11:47:40 PM

Hmm....well, here is the second page.  I know it's not as much..but I tried to make it look a tad better than the other one.  

[IMG]http://img152.imageshack.us/img152/8084/img005iv9.th.jpg (http://img152.imageshack.us/my.php?image=img005iv9.jpg)

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Post by: DarkFlood2 on August 04, 2006, 06:11:52 PM

Work on your handwriting.


Please.

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Post by: Ephiam on August 04, 2006, 07:14:23 PM

Well, I'm trying to do the other pages on the computer.  here is an example (which sucks horrible) of my first time trying to do it.

[IMG]http://img264.imageshack.us/img264/5290/img005wj1.th.jpg (http://img264.imageshack.us/my.php?image=img005wj1.jpg)

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Post by: EXO Muffin on August 09, 2006, 10:25:42 AM

That's cool, maybe you should hexadekachromize it on MS Paint, it'll make it much clearer. Also, can you make bios and such?

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Post by: Ephiam on August 10, 2006, 02:39:29 PM

Yeah.  I shall soon give out the character bio's a such.  However, here is the third page...which I'm sure I posted...but meh, here it is:

http://img148.imageshack.us/img148/1666/comicpage3ft6.th.jpg (http://img148.imageshack.us/my.php?image=comicpage3ft6.jpg)

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Post by: Almeidaboo on August 10, 2006, 02:56:44 PM

Okay, here´s the deal: you got 2 traces there:  darker one and a lighter one. In my conception of good drawing, these can´t coexist except in painting.

Do you gotta decide: or you use all the traces dark and defined or you do everything lighter, cause otherwise everything seems to be dirty!

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Post by: EXO Muffin on August 12, 2006, 07:23:24 AM

See what I mean?:
Plus; it's easier to color on the computer once it's hexadekachromized, then just convert it to a gif, and you can add more color.

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Post by: EXO Muffin on August 12, 2006, 08:03:14 AM

Hey, if you want me to color your comic, I will. Here's a sample:

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Post by: Ephiam on August 12, 2006, 10:56:16 PM

o.o Niiiice.  Wel, if you can then I would like you to.  I'd like to look at it when colored ^.^  No rush though, whenever you feel up to it, if you want to finish it that is.

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Post by: EXO Muffin on August 13, 2006, 08:53:11 AM

AWESOME! Also, I use Photoshop 5 for it. To color, I just use 50% opaque color burn with the darkest shade of the color(;it turns black and stuff into a dark shade of the color), darken with the middle color(at 50% opaque), and lighten with the light shade(50%, again), then lighten it at 10-33% opaque color of light source. It's aaaalll in the Photoshop.

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Post by: EXO Muffin on August 13, 2006, 10:06:49 AM

I upgraded the speech bubbles! Bwahahaha!

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Post by: Ephiam on August 13, 2006, 10:48:47 AM

Good ^^.  It looks nice.  Hope ya don't mind doin it.

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Post by: I Have a Sandwich on August 13, 2006, 04:39:44 PM

Why wold you use bevel bubbles? They always looked unprofessional to me.

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Post by: EXO Muffin on August 14, 2006, 04:29:50 PM

I dunno. Just stroking the bubbles looked too boring, to me. Ew.

Guy1:Hey, what'cha doing?

Guy2:We're maintaing these locations.

Guy2:We have to send feedback information to the people there; the dots.*points*

Guy1:Can you...talk to the dots?

Guy3: Houston, drive 3...over.

Guy1: Oh. Cool. Can you talk to them, again?

Guy2: No, sorry. That might agitate the dots.

Guy3: We DON'T agitate the dots.

Guy4: *comes in* What? Who's agitatin' mah dots?

Guy4: *faces Guy1*'Chu agitatin' mah dots?!

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Post by: Ephiam on August 14, 2006, 07:35:05 PM

o.o?   So..uh..hows the coloring goin? lol.  Well, while i'm at nothing I decided to practice yet again.

Yes, yes, I know.  It's basically a copy (well, more than that -.-) of the FMA manga.  But, I'm just using it to practice drawing and such.  But...it didn't turn out NEARLY as good as it does in person for some odd reason :|  Oh-well....ugh, here it is.   (NOTE: it reads from left to right ^^)


(http://img79.imageshack.us/my.php?image=img008uf4.jpg)

(not as good as any manga page, I know.  But it's a start -.-)

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Post by: EXO Muffin on August 15, 2006, 02:09:04 PM

Looks good; but that's not Edward's hairstyle. His is more Sephiroth bangs+Mullet back+pony tail.

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Post by: Ephiam on August 15, 2006, 07:46:42 PM

Ya...I kind of screwed up on the hair.  But, oh-well.  That's the only way to learn =P :happy:

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Post by: GrooveMan.exe on August 15, 2006, 07:53:42 PM

It's too large. If this comic is indeed styles for the net, resizing is in order; try not to go taller than 1.5 screens and no wider than one screen only.

Oh, and it's not funny. It's not a requirement, but that's expected from most comics.

I don't draw loads, so I can't comment on the artwork, but it seemed clear enough (even if I had to scroll around to see most of it).

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Post by: Ephiam on August 16, 2006, 01:31:52 PM

So which one are you talking about? lol.  The newest one or the old ones?

anywhoo..I'm still wondering if EXO is working on my comic thing still :|

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Post by: Moosetroop11 on August 16, 2006, 01:48:47 PM

Todays pointers are:
1) It's a little too big and sketchy to understand
2) You need to have a clearer text in those bubbles.

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Post by: EXO Muffin on August 16, 2006, 05:22:51 PM

Erk...I'll get to it, eventually...I don't really feel like it right now. I'm really sorry.

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Post by: I Have a Sandwich on August 16, 2006, 05:25:42 PM

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Originally posted by GrooveMan.exe
It's too large. If this comic is indeed styles for the net, resizing is in order; try not to go taller than 1.5 screens and no wider than one screen only.

Oh, and it's not funny. It's not a requirement, but that's expected from most comics.

It doesnt have to be funny. A good webcomic is either one of two things: funny or rather good artwork, or just good.

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Post by: Ephiam on August 16, 2006, 05:44:04 PM

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Originally posted by I Have a Sandwich

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Originally posted by GrooveMan.exe It's too large. If this comic is indeed styles for the net, resizing is in order; try not to go taller than 1.5 screens and no wider than one screen only. Oh, and it's not funny. It's not a requirement, but that's expected from most comics.

It doesnt have to be funny. A good webcomic is either one of two things: funny or rather good artwork, or just good.

It wasn't mean to be funny (which ever one your talking about).  But... it might not have good artwork OR be just good.  I dunno, fe me, I think it's good.


Any, EXO, it's ok.  I was in no rush...I was just wondering why you never mention it :D.

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Post by: Ephiam on August 18, 2006, 06:54:08 PM

Sorry for the double post people.  I just wanted to post this pic up here as well.

http://img153.imageshack.us/my.php?image=img010cy2.jpg :hi:

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Post by: Almeidaboo on August 18, 2006, 07:12:58 PM

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Originally posted by Ephiam
Sorry for the double post people.  I just wanted to post this pic up here as well.

 http://img153.imageshack.us/my.php?image=img010cy2.jpg :hi:

Looks awesome, from the neck down (except for the weird arm...I wouldn´t hit a girl with a arm like that...or would I?)

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Post by: I Have a Sandwich on August 18, 2006, 07:14:15 PM

Is that supposed to be Lust from FMA?

Anyways, dude, learn how to trim out the image. Next time I'm not waiting for a whole bunch of useless white to load.

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Post by: Ephiam on August 18, 2006, 07:20:19 PM

Yeah, i'm practicing from the FMA manga so I can learn to draw -.- lol.  Well..learn to draw better.  I find it a pretty good ay to do so.

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Post by: Ephiam on August 19, 2006, 06:34:49 PM

I hate making these double posts.  Well, here is another pic:

http://img77.imageshack.us/my.php?image=img011rk8.jpg

Sorry for such the big size.  I know it's not that good, but I found it to be pretty neat for something I have done.

The picture is of Lance, the main character for the story Valcon Sky: Children of the sin.  The very un-read story I have posted here.  Lol.  well, give me your omments as always.