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Title: Rise of the Phoenix
Post by: Yhtomitsu on October 05, 2006, 12:50:07 AM

Hey all

My mates and I are starting a game we talked about about 3 years ago and I wanted your opion on the game.

    The world is in a state of war between the Dragons and the Phoenixs they are not allowed to directly attack each other so they use humans to do the fighting. When a Dragon give their power to the human, That Human immeadiatley gets immense power and the dragon goes in to the human creatign a half human, half Dragon creature. But when a Phoenix's give their powers o the human they only get a tiny bit of power and the phoenix dies but with a phoenix they come back after they die so they come back and give the human more power so in the end the Phoenix Human becomes more powerful than the Dragon human.

   Anyway The Game starts of with an ordinary human and he's sent to go get help from the Wizards of Ragsanok because the Gaurdian Empire (the Bad guys) are attacking the Alexandrian (the good guys) Outpost and they can't take them on their own and you meet many new people on the way and theres a huge twist to the story but I won't tell you that because that will ruin the whole story .

So please give your thoughs on this I've only started making the game so there wont be any screenshots just yet butill try to get some up as soon as possible


Thanks.

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Post by: Bhall on October 05, 2006, 06:09:42 AM

Can you expalin some more why do the dragons and phoenix fight.What is the purpose of the war.And some info about the characters would be good.

EDIT:will there be a way to chose your side to fight for dragons or phoenix or no one.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on October 05, 2006, 11:54:04 AM

Yeah you will be able to choose which side your on. The Dragons and Phoenix are fighting because the dragons thinking they were superior wanted to calim the land as thier own and the only think stoping them was the phoenix's. Now for some aof the Characters: (names may change)

Name: Marcus Von Williams
Race:Human
Age: 19
Weapon: Long Sword
Bio: ONe of the main characters in Rise of the Phoenix. He's always calm and has a good sense of justice. He always obeys teh laws no matter what.

Name: Edward Coltrane
Race: Dwarf / Human
Age: 23
Weapon: Spear
Bio: A half dwarf, half human charatcer with the strength and the keep eye for treasure of a dwarf and the magic of a human. He's quick to make jugdement of people and this can often lead him into trouble.

Name: Lance Chambers
Race: Dragon / Human
Age: 18
Weapon: 2 longs Swords or a Claymore
Bio: The other main Character in the Game. He's quick to act doesn't like people who talk to much. prefers action. Loves to see the funny side to things.

 So thats just a few of the characters I havent fully made up the story line I hope you like the idea I tried to make it as original as possible. Please tell me what you think.

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Post by: SilverBlade on October 05, 2006, 02:08:48 PM

The story is ok but don't make it too complicated. It's also a pluspoint that you can choose on whoes side your on.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on October 05, 2006, 03:17:06 PM

Ok not to comlicated got it nice and simple

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Post by: Moosetroop11 on October 05, 2006, 06:09:27 PM

Uh huh, the complicated bit is the phoenix giving power bit. It'll take skill to convey that.

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Post by: Daetyrnis on October 05, 2006, 07:23:59 PM

I'd change the names 'Guardian Empire' and 'Alexandria'.
The Phoenix power-giving bit seems overly and unnecessaryly complicated, but it could work.  It's hard to judge the game though, as you have a brief overview of the beginning, no enemy (other than the opposing race, which is choice specific), and no graphic preview.

good luck. ^_^

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Post by: Revolution911 on October 05, 2006, 07:33:10 PM

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Originally posted by Yhtomitsu
the Gaurdian Empire (the Bad guys) are attack the Alexandrian

Ahahahahaha.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on November 07, 2006, 10:08:22 AM

i finally got a few screen shots for the game one is of an interior and the other is the main city which i have to fix up but check them out and tell me what u think.

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Post by: Raen Ryong on November 07, 2006, 12:03:33 PM

They're too small to see/analyse properly, but they appear to be very bare.

Any map should have decoration of some kind, something to fill the big spaces in the maps. If a map is proving hard to fill, make it smaller if there are absolutely massive spaces.

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Post by: Bhall on November 08, 2006, 08:30:07 AM

Like Raen said they are too small plus empty.Try to fill them up a bit more with some details.You should chek others ppl screenshots from their game and see how they fill up the map.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on November 10, 2006, 06:04:51 AM

thanks for the comments ill try to improve them this is my first attempt at mapping so i need to what im doing wrong so thanks

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on November 11, 2006, 04:30:38 AM

alright ive improved the inside one tell me what u think



http://img134.imageshack.us/img134/1060/improvedscreen1pu8.png

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Post by: Meiscool-2 on November 11, 2006, 04:35:28 AM

Better, but still very plain.

Try making it look more home-like.

Example:

EDIT: Here's one using almost the same chipset as you're using.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on November 11, 2006, 03:39:34 PM

wow your really good at this do u get all your chipsets from charas or do u make them your self and thanks for the info and your maps look cool

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Post by: Meiscool-2 on November 11, 2006, 06:06:41 PM

I compile most of them myself.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on November 11, 2006, 06:39:32 PM

wow your really good how long have you been doing this and are u a natural or did it take time to develope this skill at mapping

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Post by: Meiscool-2 on November 12, 2006, 03:35:04 AM

I think I've been doing this for 2.5 years. It mostly came naturally, but it did take some practise. I get better and better every map I make.

Now, if you want to ask more questions, save them for PMs, unless you don't mind your game's thread being overcome with off-topic posts.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on November 12, 2006, 04:32:23 AM

ok ive given the place a bit of a make over and tell me what u think now

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Post by: drenrin2120 on November 12, 2006, 04:40:27 AM

ehh... I think you're trying too hard. You've combined a few chipsets that simply don't match. Plus, it's too open and the rooms seem a little small and the house a weird design. When makingm aps you've got to think about a few things, what looks good for an RPG, what works, and what's realistic or atleast believable.

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Post by: Meiscool-2 on November 12, 2006, 04:59:56 AM

The walls are to low. Raise them up a little.

Also, take a look at mine. The rooms are not square persay, but they also arn't completly oddified. They have a realistic house look to them.

Second, make sure to set the bed's top against the wall. The way you have it now. it looks like the bed is one tile away from the wall. So just move the beds up one tile.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on December 13, 2006, 11:17:19 AM

finally i got a basic demo i know the intro sucks i need to fixs that just tell me what you think and please dont be too harsh this is my first game


http://www.uploading.com/files/Y8NKFN4J/Rise_of_the_Phoenix.rar.html

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on December 16, 2006, 08:40:41 AM

ok ive finally finished with the main characters here they are:

Name: Timbo
Age: 19
Race: Human
Weapon(s): Claymore
Side: Good
biography: One of the three main characters in rise of the pheonix. He always believes in doing right by the law. He's the king of Creatonius's personal soldier. he was trained as a soldier from a very young age.



Name: Shadow
Age: 18
Race: Dragon/ Human
Weapon(s): 2 Long Swords
Side: Evil
Biography: Shadow is the Prince of the evil Arcania. His twisted soul reeks havoc where ever he goes but there is a good side to this person he was once good but after gainign the power of the mighty black dragon he has no longer had control of himself.



Name: Toxic
Age: 23
Race: Dwarf/ Human
Weapon(s): Spear
Side: Neutral
Biography: Toxic was born after a human got drunk and made love to a dwarf. Therefore he was a mistake. He was never mean't to exsist. He grew up with the abilities of both the human and the dwarf. Therefore he was tall, had the strength of a dwarf, could you magic like humans and had a keen eye for power and treasure.



I've also added a few new features to go my game

* A new intro the last one sucked as you can see from the demo.
* The choice of 3 characters to play from each with there own side to the story
* 6 different endings
* secret ending and a sercret character to be unlocked
*interactive Dungeons


coming soon:
*movies

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on December 31, 2006, 08:28:41 AM

i got some screen shots from the game:









tell me what you like or dislike about them ok thanks

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Post by: drenrin2120 on December 31, 2006, 05:45:40 PM

Hm... never noticed the little demo there, I'll give it a go.

EDIT: It appears there server is busy.

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Post by: SilverBlade on December 31, 2006, 09:56:15 PM

1st screen: I don't know, I don't realy like the houses. They're all squares, try to make them in different sizes.

2nd screen: That's actually pretty good! Nice mapping!

3rd screen: Again, it's realy not bad, actualy good. Nice chipset. One comment: the water is to straight.

4th screen: Looks good!

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on January 01, 2007, 02:59:19 AM

alright thanks for the feedback be warned the demo is really bad i made the demo ages ago and never posted and lots have changed since then

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Post by: drenrin2120 on January 02, 2007, 04:25:37 AM

Okay, I guess it's a good thing then that the server was too busy.

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Post by: Daetyrnis on January 02, 2007, 04:35:04 AM

For the third screenshot, why are there trees in the water?

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on January 02, 2007, 06:09:32 AM

hmm i dont know it looked good at the time hang on ill fix it

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Post by: SilverBlade on January 02, 2007, 09:08:19 AM

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hmm i dont know it looked good at the time hang on ill fix it

Nooo! Don't! I like it, I have the same chipset and I put trees above the water too! It fills up the area and looks great!
You can say that the leaves are from trees from the other side of the river or something like that...

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on February 22, 2007, 11:14:02 AM

im gonna go away from charas for a while to work solidly on my game so yeah no-one will miss me so yeah laters

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Post by: Meiscool-2 on February 23, 2007, 01:13:10 AM

 :hi:

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Post by: Dominicy on February 23, 2007, 06:40:25 AM

please bring a .zip demo as a souvenire (sp?) when you come back.  :hi:

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on June 17, 2007, 08:31:17 AM

my latest demo for rise of the pheonix most of the first part f the story is done. the dialogue isnt finished waiting for my friend to finish it and the title and the choosing the characters you can only play as one at the moment but anyway have fun tell me what you think and remember its only a demo

http://www.megaupload.com/?d=HVYX5FHY

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on June 24, 2007, 11:12:12 AM

added a few new characters and more to the story. New Characters:

Matt - Thief
Aged about 12 shadows little brother a really funny character in the game there for some comedy and he loves to steal things uses a dagger.

Cain - Paladin
Aged about 32. One of Creatonius soldiers aids Timbo(needs a new name if you can think of one tell me) in his quest

Darius - Paladin
Aged about 21. Cain partner and one of Timbos closest friends. He goes on the journey with timbo.

Doug - High Mage
Aged about 19. King of Rasanok known for his extremely high elemental power.

Laurican - Thunder Mage
Aged 17. A thunder mage that trains in rasanok. one of dougs elite gaurds.

Scanes - Fire Mage
Aged 18, A fire mage loves to burn things. pyromaniac. Hates Ice.

Dunno - Ice Mage
Aged 18.Scanes Twin, A twin but the opposite a Ice mage and a skilled one at that. Hates Scanes and Fire.

So yeah there is a few new charcters. im adding more every day and making more of my game every day so yeah. I should have a new demo out soon with about half the game in it. in about or week or so im getting the dialogue done and there is gonna be two versions of the game one with voices and one without so you can have your choice well ill add more later.

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Post by: Moosetroop11 on June 24, 2007, 01:45:08 PM

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Originally posted by Yhtomitsu
the dialogue isnt finished waiting for my friend to finish it

Ooh, bad move :p Teamwork in rpgmaking is generally a recipe for disaster XD

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on June 25, 2007, 07:28:56 AM

yeah but hes working on it right now and hes one of my friends from school so yeah its gonna be ok i think we've been talking about this game and working on it for a real long time but since getting rpgmaker ive actually been able to make it.

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Post by: Shaddox on June 29, 2007, 12:51:51 PM

wow your game sounds great I played the demo and it was good too

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on June 29, 2007, 12:55:14 PM

thanks ill be realesing the next demo soon dont have a realese date yet but theres a lot more been added to the game since last time

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on June 29, 2007, 01:06:41 PM

my latest screens

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Post by: Dragonium on June 29, 2007, 04:34:38 PM

Your first two screens are pretty good, I like them.

The second two aren't so great. There's far too much open space at the side of that strip of carpet, and it looks bad. Try filling it with other walls and rooms.

Also, save your screenshots as .PNGs to prevent loss of quality.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on June 30, 2007, 12:03:17 AM

yeah im not that good at mapping thats why im trying to improve yeah thanks for the comment ill try and fix them up and ill post some new ones later

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Post by: Phayre on June 30, 2007, 01:44:27 AM

Also, the corners of the wall don't blend with the floor. Maybe edit the corner tiles to be transparent and 2nd layer, or just change the floor tile there.
Otherwise, good, except the girl needs at least one question mark after the "WHAT HAPPENED TO MY CAT" thing.
I still love your battlechars, and dearly wish you'd been taking requests before I made my own. *sob*

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on June 30, 2007, 02:33:46 PM

hows this

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Post by: Phayre on June 30, 2007, 04:15:32 PM

The table looks a bit too rustic for a castle. Works for a bar or a small house, not a castle. Maybe a big fancy statue or sommat? Or just another room?
I like your work on the corners though. Looks better now.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on June 30, 2007, 10:19:16 PM

yeah i just wanted to fill up the space theres not much in the chip set so i couldnt really add more to it

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Post by: Phayre on June 30, 2007, 10:37:19 PM

Check for charsets. There are probably some good things you can use as events.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on July 01, 2007, 08:52:26 AM

yeah ill do that im also currently working on a CMS.

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Post by: emiiru on July 01, 2007, 09:10:39 AM

You could use pillars,  since it's a pretty big room.  Also don't just fill things to fill things as they say. Sometimes things are bare.

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on July 01, 2007, 10:15:05 AM

pillars yeah that could work as well or i could just make the room thinnner

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Post by: Yhtomitsu on July 03, 2007, 12:43:36 PM

alright ive had another go at the room tell me what you think

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Post by: Xziayer on November 11, 2007, 12:39:02 AM

Its great. However the skinny part is too narrow, try adding a little more space and a few decoration

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Post by: RPG noob on November 11, 2007, 08:35:21 AM

Ouch bumpage.

The bottom of one of the torches is missing  :D