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Off-Topic => Creative arts => Topic started by: blaman on September 13, 2004, 12:25:26 AM

Title: Blaman's Adventure
Post by: blaman on September 13, 2004, 12:25:26 AM

Give me feed back and advice on how to make the nextone better.

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Post by: SaiKar on September 13, 2004, 12:41:56 AM

The ^ icon pretty much sums it up.

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Post by: blaman on September 13, 2004, 12:50:32 AM

Ok, I know it's stupid. But I want to know how to improve.

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Post by: Al~Len on September 13, 2004, 12:55:10 AM

Allen's not quite sure if he gets it... o_o

*stares at comic*...

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Post by: blaman on September 13, 2004, 12:58:23 AM

Protoman= Robot= computer= Blaman shoots comps out the window=broken window=loss of alolwnece.

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Post by: SaiKar on September 13, 2004, 01:15:44 AM

If you have to explain the joke it is not really funny anymore.

If you want to improve, I would suggest making it easier to follow. Pretend that the readers are stupid. I have no idea what you are thinking, so the only way for us to get the jokes is to make them pretty obvious.

Oh, and making a background color, even if it an off-white or something, would probably help too.

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Post by: blaman on September 13, 2004, 01:02:05 PM

Here's the next one. This one was done before I came back this morning. So it may not be any good.

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Post by: Darkfox on September 13, 2004, 03:48:46 PM

The oldest trick in the books and Megaman fell for it... how dumb can one get?

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Post by: Red Giant on September 13, 2004, 03:53:10 PM

Urm. Meh.

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Post by: blaman on September 13, 2004, 08:49:23 PM

This one is NOT ment to be funny... it's ment to move the story...

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Post by: Red Giant on September 13, 2004, 08:58:04 PM

Um, One thing. There are like, extra white lines and bits of other panels and stuff all around the comics that you might wanna clean up. Did you make it in MS Paint?

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Post by: blaman on September 13, 2004, 09:01:18 PM

Yeah, then converted and fixed the colors in Idraw.

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Post by: blaman on September 14, 2004, 11:35:57 AM

Next one is here!

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Post by: Red Giant on September 14, 2004, 11:53:42 AM

Ur. It's sort of. The joke is funny, but it's not executed well.

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Post by: Weregnome on September 17, 2004, 09:40:43 AM

thats just a meh to me.

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Post by: Ryoshin on September 17, 2004, 10:59:53 AM

Lol?

Very un-funny, I quess.