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Off-Topic => Archive => Old Game Discussion => Topic started by: Wynwalk12 on November 23, 2004, 11:59:16 PM

Title: My new game 4 real Time Spheres
Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 23, 2004, 11:59:16 PM
O.K.

Times Spheres is bades on a comic book created by me...Its about an olg sage who creates seven mystic spheres wich gives you an unique power but if they all come togeter for the wrong use they can be devasting.

You play Meko & Chrono(there brothers) and the rest of the gang. You are just ordenary kids who were drivng down a bridge where a drunk taxi cab driver comes along and knocks you off the bridge,the two of you are seperated and Meko (the youngest) finds a time sphere which gives him powers. But demons are looking for the time spheres too. Tetasis( the main boss) has an army of demons looking for the timespheres. Slash and Kaskay( two of Tetasis minoins) find you and take the time sphere. But luckily your master, Sicemera, comes and saves you. You then learn about the time spheres and there majical powers and now youre on a quest to stop Tetasis.

Theres more to it but I dont want to give it away.

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Bios:


Chrono Michimora
Age: 19
Degree: Marcail Arts
Info: Chrono is a real trouble and likes being the boss and taking things into his own hands. His parents were killed and Sicemera took him and as a son, and a pupil.

Meko Michimora
Age:17
Degree: Marcail Arts
Info: Meko is a kind and gentle person who doesnt like people to get hurt. He spends alot of time training and even more time looking out for Chrono.

Sicemera Mushachi
Age:37
Degree: Marcail Arts
Info: Sicemera is Meko's and Chrono's father and Master. He found them as young children and decided to take them in and teach them the ways of the Marcail Arts.

These are all the basic bios but there are more but I think there are too many...so blah screenies very very very soon!
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 12:19:01 AM
This is the Title Screen
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 12:21:29 AM
This is when Tetasis is plotting to get the time spheres
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 12:25:12 AM
The peaceful town of Meganopolis
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Post by: Red Giant on November 24, 2004, 12:25:50 AM
I'm sorry, but this is really, really cliched.
There are magical object(s) of great power that in the wrong hands cause bad stuff, meaning you have to get em before badguys do. The main character's parents that got killed. The main character is even called Chrono.
Why did this sage make these spheres anyway? And if he has enough power to create them, shouldnt he be easily powerful enough to stop the demons himself?
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 12:28:41 AM
This is when they are trying to get to school
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 12:31:41 AM
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I'm sorry, but this is really, really cliched.
There are magical object(s) of great power that in the wrong hands cause bad stuff, meaning you have to get em before badguys do. The main character's parents that got killed. The main character is even called Chrono.
Why did this sage make these spheres anyway? And if he has enough power to create them, shouldnt he be easily powerful enough to stop the demons himself?



First of all the sage made the time spheres because he was dying and new the great evil was aproaching so he made the time spheres.

And second of all does it really matter if its cliched the point is that it will be the drama and the climax
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 12:34:04 AM
OK...this is when they are riding through the woods
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Post by: Red Giant on November 24, 2004, 12:37:35 AM
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Originally posted by Wynwalk12
First of all the sage made the time spheres because he was dying and new the great evil was aproaching so he made the time spheres.

And second of all does it really matter if its cliched the point is that it will be the drama and the climax

So, how was he dying exactly? And just telling me it's gonna be dramatic doesnt convince me.
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 12:38:47 AM
This is when they are late and Keari is say its your fault in the first place we are late, because he was telling her how they got new swords
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 12:41:47 AM
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So, how was he dying exactly? And just telling me it's gonna be dramatic doesnt convince me.[/B]


Hes dying because hes an old man...and fat...hehe

And is this dramatic enough for ya?

The teache is being shot by Vandule because he was stealing money from him
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 12:43:53 AM
This is chrono's "REACTION" accidentaly put eaction...
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Post by: Red Giant on November 24, 2004, 12:44:33 AM
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And is this dramatic enough for ya?

The teache is being shot by Vandule because he was stealing money from him

Uhm, well, no, not at all.
1: All of the students seem to be fixated on the board as if nothing is happening, 2: You used the goofy FFL charset for the teacher and 3: You named the pic "NOOO! IM DEAD!" All which decreases the tragic feel of the scene.
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 12:46:27 AM
Does it really matter its just a pic...and do you have to be such a big critic...sheesh _sweat_
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Post by: VulcanRaven336 on November 24, 2004, 12:49:19 AM
Looks like a good game with a great storyline. Inform me when you have a playable demo so I can play it for my self.
Great job on chipset jobs.
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 12:51:58 AM
Thx! Im gonna take off the facesets they seem to kind of get in the way of the feeling...
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Post by: VulcanRaven336 on November 24, 2004, 12:53:35 AM
Good idea, not only does it take up more room in the text box, but for me, I see no point of having the face in the text. Better to just have the name of the guy at the top when he is talking!
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Post by: Revolution911 on November 24, 2004, 02:59:31 AM
i have to be hnest...i agree 100% with red on this one...why did he create the time spheres if hes dying?......not every old man wakes up and says "im gonna die soon, better get workin on my time spheres!"
the main chars name is chrono.......
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Post by: robotroy on November 24, 2004, 03:13:11 AM
I think there's some potential here, but it is cliched.  Granted, it can be hard to come up with ideas that have never been done before.  But here's some suggestions:

1.  Come up with a real reason why this guy created the time spheres.  Also, explain why he would make them if they can be used for both good and evil.  You'd think he'd take something like that into consideration.

2.  Change the main character's name to something other than Chrono (or Crono).  

That seems like it addresses most or all of the criticism you've received so far.  

On a more positive note, I really like your title screen.  The screen shots you've shown so far also look like they have potential.  Keep it up!
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 02:59:25 PM
Everyone keeps asking why he made the time spheres.

Well the answer is because... :blue-eye: I really dont know myself, I'll have to ask my freind...and do you all think I shoulg get new sprites...they are basically generated ones...and I might change Chrono's name to Seyno,....does anyone have suggestions tho...
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Post by: rhonin on November 24, 2004, 05:42:51 PM
Altogether, it sounds good to me. But you could do a little more work on it. And I think changing the name from Chrono to anything would be better, just to, ya know, ripped off. But all in all, I'd play it.  :D
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Post by: xJericho on November 24, 2004, 05:49:44 PM
I can't watch the pictures my hero as bad guy shootin' at a teacher *urghz*
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Post by: Red Giant on November 24, 2004, 06:02:51 PM
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Well the answer is because... :blue-eye: I really dont know myself

No. That is not good. Understand what I'm trying to say here, I'm not trying to seem like a meanie but unless there is an actual REASON behind the game, it's not gonna work, at least for me.
It sounds like the kind of thing someone has thought about for 30 seconds then decided to make a game. I suggest you get a plan for what you're doing.
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 24, 2004, 06:51:33 PM
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I can't watch the pictures my hero as bad guy shootin' at a teacher *urghz*



 :D Its was just for fun at first then it started getting serious.
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 27, 2004, 07:41:49 PM
Sry I havent been on much...made a web site.

I will update the site to keep ya informed with what Im doin, check back every now and then cause I will be putting up a demo of the demo...maybe 15-20 minutes long.


Oh forgot to put link...www.freewebs.com/wynwalk12
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Post by: MrMister on November 27, 2004, 08:13:17 PM
Well so far it looks like the story and graphics suck, so you better wow me with gameplay.
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Post by: Wynwalk12 on November 27, 2004, 11:34:26 PM
Well...err...that really doent encourage me to do better... :|