M'game, Under the Surface

[jizjiz]

Ok, My game... Any one who cant be arsed to read, shame on you

World Back Drop:

The world of Lelipa was a peaceful place, full of magic, mystery and wonder. The world started to governed by a system of military conscription if the person was capable of fighting. Countrys were on edge, fearing that they would be attacked by the others.
The leader of The United Mountains of Rei (Vesius Conglameray 3rd) abandoned the country and went into hiding after he was caught by the press having an affair with the leader of the barbarian mercenarys of the north, Ren Worfor. The UMR's citizens asked for asylum in the neighbouring countrys. Some high class aristocrats were allowed in, but many were resused a home. These people became the most cold blooded tribe of wanderers in history. The Knights of the Forsaken. They were known for theyre sadistic assasinations of leaders, all a shadow of they're former selves. Many countrys allied and formed larger unstopable forces. The Thieves and Assasins were praised for theyre work, and Kings and Queens preferences in theyre noblemen changed, and holy paladins and sorcerers were shunned in favour of necromancers and dark knights. Monarchs became corrupt and dishonest and started to take advantage of the face they had the devine right. The Red Mages and the Queen of Corrayunt stayed true to each other, but met an untimley end at the hands of Ren Worfor and her barbarian warriors. The drawsmen* of Muras were no longer feared as they once were due to the ever groing cockiness of the leaders. This is the story of one of those drawsmen.

*Drawsmen are warriors who steal the abilitys of thier foes like kirby...

Characters:

Name:Ally
Age: 81
Classrawsmen
Description: A young drawsmen from Muras, the Drawsmen live for an age so his appearance is youthful. When The Knights of the Forsakens attempt at the drawsmens genocide goes tits-up, many were destroyed when the KOF's top mages cast a row of Ultima spells. Many of they're own men were killed aswell. Ally ran from the battlefield, for he knew if he stayed he was goin to die.When Vesius left the UMR his son, Lu Fei became the captian of the UMR, Who saw Ally fleeing from the battle field. He gave chase, but one thing Lu Fei did not exept happend...He was absorbed by Ally. He was instantley Transformed, taking all of Lu Feis Sword Skills and strength. With his new power, he left the carnage behind and went to see his brother to gloat...

if any one knows how to fix the face sets let me know please

Thats all for now, 2 screenies for you...How do you post two screenies at once? oh well

[jizjiz]

No. 2 in my saga

[Neslein]

maybe you should make the background more like... black?
Its because black is better for the eyes than brown...

(maybe it is black, but then my eyes are screwing completely up! )

[jizjiz]

hmmmmm
You reckon my ideas any good?

[Neslein]

haven't read your story... i am too tired for that right now ... let me come up with some feedback another okay?
Well if you would like feedback on your storyline...  

[SaiKar]

Originally posted by jizjiz
Ok, My game... Any one who cant be arsed to read, shame on you

World Back Drop:

The world of Lelipa was a peaceful place, full of magic, mystery and wonder... Countrys were on edge, fearing that they would be attacked by the others.

Erm, which is it? Is it a peaceful place or are people on edge?

[jizjiz]

WAS a peaceful place, it isnt know countrys are on edge! You silly billy

[HackersTotalMassLaser]

XD there was a "was" there you are right!