Swords Path

[Secret Box]

ok, I have worked on it for way too long and think it can't get any better but i'm probably wrong. but anyway here it is...

:Prelude:

a little after the beginning of time...
there is one god and one devil. the devil wants the earth to be his/her planet. so he instantly go and spreads his/her reign of terror on earth as much as he can. god comes down knowing this shouldn't be happening and fought a great fight. as god finishes the devil, the devil puts the energy he/she has left into a sword and hides it. god had no idea this was going on as he did the final blow and got rid of the devil for good... or so he thought.

1000 years later...

Warren (an infant) managed to crawl away from his parents into a small hole and saw something shiny and you know how babies like shiny things, well it was the sword and the second he touched it his phisical form changed. he was engulfed by power and darkness and his power started to spread long and far in ways that could not be seen. the sword had grew in power so much after the thousand years that there was no hope. Warren was as strong as a god. infact god at that point in time knew what was going on and being god knew he had to do something. he also knew he was no match for that infant. warren was too strong. so god sacrificed himself to seal warren along with the sword and all his power into another realm that was only accessable once and for only one person with good intentions.

another 700 years go by and peoples beliefs had changed as they do in real life over time. well, they believe there was a god up there protecting them. They also believed that the portal exists and everything about that, except that it let to a god that was a good god that could also get angry with them. they didn’t believe about how bad warren really was.
So… you stumble upon the portal in the hangout and are confused about everything. You take the sword being unarmed and confused about the situation. When you get back your friends are gone. You are forced to go on a quest to save them. You have no idea what could have happened to them. On that quest you realize that you haven’t had the best luck since you got the sword, so you do some research and read that the sword must never leave god and if it does it must be returned for the sake of the earth. Your quest is now to return the sword and in order to do that you must locate a wizard (the great Tysmic wizard) to see if he can get you to another portal. It turns out he can and you go to return the sword but then it all becomes clear to you and you realize why it let you access the portal even though you , at the time didn’t know what it was. You must destroy warren. Warren was already engulfed with darkness and didn’t need the sword anymore. The sword did contain much power except it wasn’t access through touch anymore. So you fight him and the long epic fight begins and ends and after you defeat him, you...

I didn’t know where to go from here so it would help if people could give their opinions. Here are three of mine:

After you defeat warren, you...
-revive god with the sword and all is good again.
-become the new god.
-save the world and no god is presents, but you are a hero. ^_^

[aboutasoandthis]

I like it but I stand by what I said earlier. Your evil goddess needs a reason to be evil. I mean look at Satan. He had a pseudo form of racism. Warren, he can stay as he is. All that dark magic probably ****** him up and no one would want to go near him (If there are people in his relm). I like what I see, and I didn't give out any extra ideas!  

[Meiscool-2]

Sounds like a book I once wrote called "The Magi", where God and Satan battled and god lost. It was about the angels and their tale of survival, though, it doesn't end pretty.

[Secret Box]

meiscool: is that a compliment?

everybody: I still need help with my ending!!!!

[Secret Box]

is anybody there because I really do need help with my ending.

everybodys opinion counts!!!

[ZeroKirbyX]

When you say "God", fo you mean that Catholic God or just some random god?

And about, you don't need a reason why a god is evil. Look at Hades. You never really saw anything that said "Hades was evil because he was short changed at Mickey Dee's.". He was a god, and the power of gods is absolute and within themselves.

[Meiscool-2]

Originally posted by Secret Box
meiscool: is that a compliment?

Don't act so suprised. I give compliments where they deserve it.

[aboutasoandthis]

Good Point, but I think Hades had a reason.

Would you want your older brother to rule the universe?

EDIT:
Or are you talking about the real Greek Hades. That one wasn't evil. He just wanted some *****.

[coreystranick]

The real Greek Hades was a brother too Zeus. He resented Zeus and the other Olympians for having a nice place to live, while he was stuck in the pit of the earth. The version you speak of I have never heard of before, do you mind if you give me a jist of that storyi in a PM, I am always ready to learn something new about Greek Mythology

[ZeroKirbyX]

Originally posted by aboutasoandthis
Or are you talking about the real Greek Hades. That one wasn't evil. He just wanted some *****.

He was the Greek's embodiment of darkness. He was their idea of evil. But REAL ideas of gods aren't based like an RPG. Imagine having some old Greeks sitting down going "Okay, this is our dark god" "Why is he dark? What is his motivation?" "We should plan that..." Gods aren't men. They don't need reasons.

[Meiscool-2]

Death isn't evil. Death hates to do his job.

[Secret Box]

gods dont need reasons to act the way they do. they were here before the beginning of time they weren't created they were just kinda, here.

and no i wasnt talking about a specific regious god i was just being vague and saying simply a god and a devil. i dont want to get caught up in the religious stuff.

[aboutasoandthis]

ZeroKirbyX: Well, I still like the idea of an evil god having a reason. It just makes the story seem deeper. Unless he's insane, then it works. I guess this is just a thing that makes RPG stories and fantasy stuff fun for me.

coreystranick: I know almost nothing at all about greek mythology so I'm probably wrong. Please tell me about this.

I heard a story about Hades (the man) taking a woman down with him to the pits of Hades (The Place). Her absence caused droughts and famine, so Hades allowed her to return to the surface world every so often. This made the seasons. When the girl came out, it was spring. Eventually came summer. In autum, she would go back down, and in winter, everything would die.

I think the girl's name was either Persephone (SP) or Penelope. I don't think this story is true at all because I've never really heard of snow in Greece.

As for you Secret Box: I'd say start with what the central conflict of your storyline, in this case I think it's to return the sword to the gods, and ask yourself "How do you want the player to feel after the game is over?" If you want them to cheer, then make a heroic ending. If you want them to be confused and think about your storyline, leave a couple loopholes in it. Not much else to say without just flat out giving you an idea.

[ZeroKirbyX]

I think he means Persephone.

[Secret Box]

no i mean i really dont know how it should end...

should you revive the real god with the sword after the fight, be the next real god after the fight, or just not have a god or devil after the fight and you are just a hero.

tell me which you think is better for the story or come up with your own ending because i know everybody has a great imagination on this forum, especially meiscool. I am curious as to what you think the ending should be!