A GAME!!!!

[blaman]

Ok. This one is ORIGINOL!!! I haven't really got a story. But I cna tell you some features:
It's also a futeristic!
*There are 2 weopons you chose from at the start, but as you fight, your weopons evolve.
So, you start with a sword, use it in one way and BANG!! You get  a wide range sword. Use it the other and you get a longer sword.
After that it depends on what type of attacks you use then it gose to a SP sword (No matter what sword you have) then it gose to this and that! I'm not ruining the surprise.
*  Loads of combonations of charaters.  
High attack, Low brains
High Defense, low attack
You chose!
* and soon to be uptadted.
You chose if your a boy or a girl (no difference!)
Chose an antivirus partner (Also gender selectable)
Tell me what you think of the features so far!

[Razor]

well it sounds undone
but can i ask hat you mean by antivirus partner!
hey, name him or her Norton!

[blaman]

You chose the name.
You're in the futre in this game, people have the ability to go inside computers. Think of it like MMBN (Megaman Battle Network).
Execpt that you have a team mate and that there are no net navis oor PETs. The anti virus just helps you. Like your first party member. (ok so it's not 100% origonal) There are no copied charaters but all it is is the ability to into computers. Would that be 100% origonal are is it a bit lower?

[Koji-Kabuto]

Man, learn spelling, I had a hard time reading all that.

[blaman]

Sorry. What words were wrong?

[Red Giant]

1st time:
Originol, cna, futeristic, weopons x2, gose X2, combonations, chose (should be choose), uptatadted.

2nd time:
Futre, excecpt, oor, origonal, "To into computers" should be "To  go  into computers.

Did I miss anything?

Sorry, but I'm the kinda picky about stuff like this.

[blaman]

Don't worry. That helps me, but is the idea of going into comps. origonal?

[Dorgan]

Tron dude. TRON!!!!

But that was really accidental, but it still had people  going into computers.

Sorry if you never saw Tron, and i just ruined the originality of the game.


Though it may still have it good parts. Like if the whole soceity is based off of traveling through computers, then that would be different. And bizzare, but mostly different.

[blaman]

You start in your room, sleeping. You wake up abit later but you hear your parents speaking:

Mother: It's about time we told.
Father: No. It's not time for it.
Mother: Fine... You must understand that I need to say.
Father: Hmm..... I never though of it that way. Yes, you say it today.
Mother: Finally, our child will now know.

*Mother comes up the stairs.*

Mother: [your name], wake up. I have something important to tell you.
*Mother knocks on door*
You: Come in.
*Mother comes in*
Mother: There is something i must tell you. We are no longer able to keep you as a child. You must flee into the computer networking and live in there like as if it were your own room. You will be leaving. But I'm not sending you alone. You're going to be with an anti virs program that will protect you. Be sure you stay within the city. I'll give you this net card to creat your house.
*Mother starts crying*
Mother: You must go. I'll explain later. Quickly! Go. We'll  meet agian, don't worry about it.

*You get out of bed and walk to your computer*
*You plug in a cord into the front and pop in the card.*
*A door opens and you step in*
*You're transported into your computer with your anti virus buddy*

You: So, this is how horrible the world is. It's treating me horibly.
*You start crying*
*another figure is beside you (this will vary)*
Anti virus: I know how it feels. I was just like you. I'll get you going with this type of life, don't worry.

That's all for now.


But, here are some of the characters in detail:

You:
Name: Selectable
Age: 12
Gender: Selectable
Personality:
You are a very lazy person and love to sleep. A herioc being dosn't mean that you can't be very lazy. Often you are either in bed or exploring the computer. You are also a skilled programmer and creat useful deviceses.

Antivirus Programe:
Name: Selectable
Age:
Gender: Selectable
Personality: This friend has belonged to your mother for more than you remeber. It can always be givin a task and carry it out with almost or no effort at all. Superior it is, it is just like you: lazy.
Lucklythe alarm installed in it allows it to track other viruses near you down.

How fo you think?

[smokey_locs2002]

off topic:RRWP where the hell is your game .
on topic:This game is nice needs work .(Only time can fix it).

[smokey_locs2002]

I never said it needs help I just want to read it the second thing was for this game.

[blaman]

Peoples! There are lots more stuff.I'm not even close to finishing it! RRWP, how can i "sound" the game?

[benosalankelley]

yeah....well sorta....anyhow.

[AsakuraHao2004]

Going into a Comp. Sounds a little like .hack//SIGN(Just a little, perhaps as an inspiration?), and there are some science fiction movies where people get stuck in a comp. And you yourself mentioned the Megaman Battle Network. But the main idea is original RPG-wise with the Anit-virus and gender selections. It sounds like it'd be good and the opening sample you gave is nice, but if the spelling is like you're earlier posts, it'll just be annoying (no matter how good a game, frequent bad spelling makes it annoying)

[Cornhusker]

Sci-Fi Games rock but, yes spelling and grammer must be at least 90% accurate to not get on people's nerves.  I've even played games from real computer entertainment companies (companies that make games) and they spell things wrong, too, and I don't mean on purpose.
eg. 'X-ecutioners' or 'X-treme' or
'X-treme X-ylophonist X-ecutioners of Planet X-something' (wow that was 'X-aggerated')

When you finish, you could send it to someone (ME   )to check and correct the spelling, grammer, and what-have-you.  (I also write well, so if you have any trouble with the story just ask me, 'Your Friendly Neighborhood... er... Person Like-Thing'.