war between life and death

[GhostClown]

Your game looks pretty bad. Sorry, but it looks like you through it together in a few minutes.. :\  Also, DO NOT ever post six times in a row, unless you want your thread locked.

[samus the fighter]

but no one answered me !!

[Syntax]

well, you have to show them something to catch their attention!
more screenshots, more infomational character bios, more intence plot.
even a head. i dont know. just show them something they havent seen before.

[Rune_of_Punishment]

It's also a good idea to edit you post. Dolt.

[samus the fighter]

ok this is how my stroy begins its a demo of the intro u dont play it its just about the past how the war began between life and death i will send more screenies

[samus the fighter]

my demo intro

[Leon_1990]

Decent screen.... but it makes no sense

[Sqoad]

On page one on the screenshot. What is up with the dead character floating in space or whatever it is... And they re all the same... What has happened anyways?

[samus the fighter]

ok ill explain


 long long ago there was a evil queen named lakos she wanted to rule the world with monsters but 1 day samuels farther (the main char) stood up for the humans and then the queen took his wife samuels mom and took her to be headed then he saved her and then the queen took samuels farther and showed him the war between humans and monsters and he was mad and then the queen became one of the monsters to destroy the human race and thats just the intro of the past the beging takes 15 years back when samuel is grown up and seeks the truth about the war between life and death and him and his friend jamie go into the cave were samuels farther fought lakos and they get teleported into the past and they must kill lakos and save samuels dad from death and his morther o yea and kill lakos and stop the war when it began no one knows but they must find the truth between this war!!!!!


 o yea i must get rid of them thanks lol

[samus the fighter]

this is the part were samuels farther sees the war

 them 2 people are guards


 o yea im goin to add movies soon


 is sumthing wrong with u leon?


wats wrong?

[Leon_1990]

AAAH! RTP! MY EYES ARE BURNING!

[Dragonium]

Please don't use RTP, it makes the game look bad. Using the RTP sound effects is alright, but anything else is frowned upon. Please try and get the spelling and grammar right in the game (Or it looks bad), and please, make your story a bit more unique. It seems kinda cliche.

But good luck anyway.

[samus the fighter]

ok im not do u have any sound effects like dieing sound laughing?

[Moosetroop11]

It looks okay... But did the queen say 'u' instead of 'you'?
Your characters speak in shorthand? 0_o...

[Nandez]

Lakos sounds like Lavos travleing to the past well also sound slike antoher Chrono Trigger aspect and i'm pretty sure one of those characters has Chrono head on the body.But it doesn't sound like your ripping anything off I just noticed those and had to point them out.