Kitsune Shousetsu

[Jester667]

The year is 2130. Peace has been granted for the earth for quite some time. The heroes of recent years have retired and settled down for a more calmer life. One of these is the world renowned fox-hybrid hero Ryuko Arashi. For him, life seems easy and peaceful as well. Until he receives an urgent telepathic message from his Sensei B-movie. What unfolds is a disturbing prophecy of the end of the world. The only way to save the world is to find eight crystals that hold the power to vanquish this evil. Only with the eight crystals can one attain true god-like power...for good or for evil. Now Ryuko, with the help of his friends, must travel across the globe to find the crystals and save the world, once more in an epic tale of love, betrayal, honor, and friendship.

 

Kitsune Shousetsu

Yeah, I'm pretty excited about this. I just wanted to know if the fine people at charas-project would be interested in this. I don't have any screenshots or anything as of yet, but I'll be updating. I'm using RPG Maker 2000, since XP's being dumb, and 2003 is too. So, yeah, let me know how that is.

*Most likely to be rated M, since...there's some bad language.

[CoolZidane]

Sensei B-movie?

[Jester667]

Yeah, long story. But B-movie is her name...   ;;

[CoolZidane]

So, is this a serious game or a comedy?

[aboutasoandthis]

 Originally Posted by CoolZidane
 

So, is this a serious game or a comedy?

I was going to post the exact same thing...

[Jester667]

Well, actually a little bit of both. Trying to appeal to everyone, you know. But, even though it's funny in some parts, I'd say it's more serious than anything.

[CoolZidane]

In that case, I would advise changing the name of the character. Unless Sensei B-Movie is an entirely comical character, it's probably not a good idea to give them a name like that.

[Jester667]

You might be right, but certain circumstances prohibit me to do that.

Like I said--long story.

[game_maniac]

Well, comedy or no, I think you really need to change that story, too many cliches. End of the world prophecies, eight crystals, they're all there. Wouldn't hurt to develop it a little more as well. Seriously, before even starting to work on your project, make sure you have an interesting plot.

I won't give out an opinion right now, since we know very little. Do you have a demo planned?

[Jester667]

Story looks generic at first, maybe. But, there are several plot twists that will keep it fresh, I'm sure. The eight crystals aren't the only thing to worry about, we'll leave it at that.

And as for a demo, I plan to have that up soon, yes.

[game_maniac]

I'll repost what I said in a previous thread:

See, in order to write a good story, you also need to know how to make people interested. Ok, there might be some genius plot twists in the middle, and telling it now would ruin the story, but a good story must have:

- A good beginning (or introduction).
- A good development
- A good ending (or conclusion).

It can't get more basic than this. Just write a good introduction, and people will be curious to hear the rest. If you can't make a good storyline, you might want to seek help from other people.

It's always very important to have a good introduction planned for when you announce your game, especially if it's the only thing you got.
I'm sure people will still try your demo if/when you post one, but your best bet is to try and get as much attention to your project as possible, and a story is vital to accomplish that.

[Jester667]

Good advice. So yeah, some minor revisions and a bit more planning could improve it greatly. Thanks.

[A Forgotten Legend]

Originally posted by game_maniac
I'll repost what I said in a previous thread:

See, in order to write a good story, you also need to know how to make people interested. Ok, there might be some genius plot twists in the middle, and telling it now would ruin the story, but a good story must have:

- A good beginning (or introduction).
- A good development
- A good ending (or conclusion).

It can't get more basic than this. Just write a good introduction, and people will be curious to hear the rest. If you can't make a good storyline, you might want to seek help from other people.

It's always very important to have a good introduction planned for when you announce your game, especially if it's the only thing you got.
I'm sure people will still try your demo if/when you post one, but your best bet is to try and get as much attention to your project as possible, and a story is vital to accomplish that.[/B]

*cough*Big Boo thread*cough*

I think that with some work, that this will turn out nicely.  Although, clichés equal boring.  Tell us more on the characters.  There back story, personality, and relationships with other characters.  Then Phayre could comment easier on this.

[Phayre]

Agreed. Phayre wants characters. Now. *jab*
And AFL, you're supposed to be in Europe, yes? Go away.

[Jester667]

*get jabbed* Owch! All right, fine, fine. Characters. Cool. Well, no better place to start than with the one already mentioned. There will be more to come as I update more often. Will this work for now?

Ryuko Arashi
Age: 22
Gender: Male
Birthplace: Osaka, Japan.
Hair Color: Purple/ black.
Fighting Style: Ninjitsu, Sorcery.
Eyes: Deep Sapphire Blue.
Personality: Protective of his family and friends, usually kind and friendly, but quick to anger on occasions. He's also sometimes clumsy.
Backstory: Ryuko's tale is one of optimism and hope. When he was 9 years old, his mother was brutally killed right in front of his own eyes. Orphaned, and with no place to go, Ryuko was sent to a Sorcery School in Wales, where he studied elemental magic, and became a child prodigy. After his teachings, he went back to Japan to settle down, but ended up on a lot of misadventures with some of his new friends. Now that the world is at peace, he's finally settled down and even gotten engaged. He trains with B-movie to improve his Ninjitsu skills.