Kirby RPG (Remake)

[blaman]

As some may already know I was doing a Kirby RPG, but my stupid computer wasn't working well and I lost all my work for my comp was wiped.
So I'm decideing to do this all over agian.
This time, I'm using RM2k (Not RM2k3)
I'll be posting the new story VERY soon. Bascily, story wise, it's the same. It's just going to be re done.

Edit: Old was changed to new. (Sorry for those who already read this.)

[oooog]

ookkaayy, thats great.

[blaman]

Here's the story!!!

Kirby was sleeping in dreamland. He was dreaming of food.(what else?) He slept and slept. Soon he woke up and noticed it was dark outside. Then he sees King De De De run by panicing!
Nightmere had returned. Kirby followed Nightmere as fast as he could. Once he dose make it to Nightmere, Kirby remembers about the Starod! So he runs to the fountain of dreams, and sees that it's gone! Nightmere had followed Kirby and Nightmere dissapeared! Kirby finds an odd swirling goo... Kirby's curiosity drags him into it and he was warped to...

I'm NOT going to ruin it.

So what o you think so far.
Please also include what could make it better.
Screenies will be coming some time in the futre so please don't ask.

[Apex]

sorta cleche

[blaman]

Where is it cleche?
I'm still going through the story so if you explain where it could be, I could fix it up.

[oooog]

im not really sure how to make it better, or worse, or insult or compliment it.  specifically only cuz i dont see kirby as an rpg.

[Drace]

kirby is more the platform person... ehhh thing
just like pacman