An Orphans Tale

[Krazy Mc Krazed]

Howdy there people!

Okay, time for you guys to get to know my game.

Fourteen years ago, a mysterious rape took place, the woman who was rape died, due to this. The woman who it happend to was a normal woman, looking after he children, doing the house work and deeply in love with her husband. Her husband was one of the few eilite warrior's, who worked the Kingdom (No name for the kingdom yet.) His name was Rydian. The same time his wife (Kerrie) was raped, he went missing.

The strange thing is though. When all this happend the two babys, were not harmed. Why? Surely the person who did this was cold enough to finish off the children as well, or could it be he was hoping they starved to death? Who's to know(Well except from me.).

Two days after the incident, Kerrie's mother came over for her weekly visit. To only find the body of her lifeless child. The Old woman found the children and took them into he own care.

Fourteen years later, we are now with a young man, in an orphanage, who now wants to know. Who his parents were.

Rcently in the outside world, a new emporer has been crowned, his name his Alexander. Many have doubts in this new emporer. People find his ways strange, and cruel, but some one is familiar with this person, he knows who he is and what he is doing is only the beggining.

Bios:

Name: Karl
Appearance: Working on it guys.
Age: 14
Weapon: Little tiny short swords.
Skills: Enchanted blade.
History: No memory of his parents, Karl was put in the orphanage at a young age of six months. The workers at the orphanage say he was brought here by a strange man. Lately Karl has been having strange dreams, Dreams that no one should witness.
Attitude: Karl is a happy person, though he tends to get quite shy around people. He likes to be logical, and figure things out, but dont make this fool you. His still fun to be around.

Name:Samuel
Appearance: Working on it.
Age: 14
Weapon: Various weapons
Skills: None known to him, yet.
History: Samuel was brought over from another Orphanage, after it was burnt down. He joined his current orphanage at Three years of age. He too as many other orphans knows nothing of his parents. He and Karl have grown up together and have become great friends.
Attitude: Samuel is you every day prankster. He loves to have fun and play pranks on other people. Though behind his carefree attitude he is somewhat concerned, about his friend Karl and why he is having strange dreams.

Name: Ademio
Appearance: Working on it...;.;
Age: 23
Weapon: Broad two handers.
Skills: Rage
History: Ademio is known as the big brother of the orphanage. He has been there ever since a child, but when it was time for him to leave and make his own life, he did not. He decided to stay and work for the orphanage. Ademio has a soft spot for the Owners daughter.
Attitude: Ademio, can sometimes be quite a cocky person and ureasonable at time, but he has a big heart and is quite knowlidgable in battle tactics.

Name: Lenola
Appearance: *Hiding*
Age: 22
Weapon: A rapier if she must fight.
Skills: Herblore
History: Sengia is the daugther, of the orphanages owner. She has grew up being freinds with all the orphans, she is ther person people go to when they are concerned, or worried. Sengia has grew up with Ademio has her best friend. She does not know Admeio feelings for her, but she only see him as a friend.
Attitude: Happy, perky woman who loves to help out in any way possible.

Name:Dazika
Appearance: A goblin...thats all so far <.<
Age:??
Weaponry: Claws
Skills: Goblins rush
History: Dazika is a wanderer looking for revenge on the people who killed his familiy. He will stop at nothing to find them. Over the years over his life style he has became quite a powerful warrior.
Attitude: Serious, and wont let things go. Dazika seems to be high strung mostly all the time.

Screenies:

Wait! for them!



Oh and by the way I dont want any of this  >> <<

Thank you and good bye. For now! Mwahahahha!

[jynce]

So far so good i really like it,show us some screenshots.  

[Krazy Mc Krazed]

You want screen shots! From me! How dare you ask a question!

Okay, okay. You'll get some, but wait first. I'm only just starting, so its kinda hard to make screen shots of nothing. I'll porbably have a few up tommorow okay.

Oh did I mention. Each screen shot I make you pay me five dollars.
Thank you have a nice day.

P.S If you didnt get it, most of that was a joke.

[Meiscool-2]

Hilarious. I'm totally laughing.

[Archem]

[strike]Didn't[/strike] Couldn't read too much of this, but what I did read revealed that a woman was deathly allergic to intercourse. I'm too skeptical to give it the benefit of the doubt.

[Krazy Mc Krazed]

Dude, when people get raped. Sometimes they get killed. It isnt an allergie.

[jynce]

Or the guy could have a STD and she could die overtime.

[drenrin2120]

Hm... It's interesting.

[aboutasoandthis]

I like the rape idea. If you can pull off the scene right you can make a nice scene that makes the player go "OMFG WHAT THE **** JUST HAPPENED?!" If you've played a few good horror games or Legion Saga 2, that's what I'm talking about.

I got a few problems though.

Where is grandma? After witnessing an already decaying version of her daugher, why would she give up her grandchildren?

I also have a problem with the ages. Unless they had a lot of money, there is no way they could learn how to fight with those kinds of weapons. Even if it is cliche, could you bump them up a few years? The only time I liked playing as a kid was in the game Dragon Heart.

The emperor thing is a good idea. Keep it up.

[Meiscool-2]

Originally posted by Archem2
Didn't Couldn't read too much of this, but what I did read revealed that a woman was deathly allergic to intercourse. I'm too skeptical to give it the benefit of the doubt.

So... people could be allergic to 'Senor Largo!? NO FAIR!

[DragonBlaze]

Originally posted by Krazy Mc Krazed
Dude, when people get raped. Sometimes they get killed. It isnt an allergie.

Umm, am I the only one to see a problem here? A baby takes around 9 months after someone has sex to be born. So if she dies due to the rape, no baby. And if you never planned there to be a baby, I would find another way to kill her off besides rape. Maybe someone wanted to rape her, she resisted, bam, dead.

And 14 is too young for a hero character.

[ZeroKirbyX]

Well, 14 isnt too young if done right. Most people though have the 14 year old go off FF style. "I'll go on my own with my 12 year old friend and do good!". It can work if the first partner is an older character, and after a bit the char is old enough to go it alone.

[DragonBlaze]

Yeah, 14 isn't always too young. I guess if its a save the world plot, the hero shouldn't really be saving the world at 14. Like in BoF3, Ryu and Nina were really young the first half of the game, but they weren't going off and saving the world or anything like that. I have no problem playing with 14 year old characters unless they're fighting these bad guys who wiped out legeons of trained soldiers and/or anyone else who got in their way.

[Desimodontidae]

Game that starts with a rape... theres something original. Im liking, not too sure how good of a story can be made from where it leaves off though.

[Meiscool-2]

I dunno about the plot, or the characters, or the maps, or the battle system for that matter. This all sounds meh to me.