Manga-thing coming soon?

[Gary]

Originally posted by coreystranick
Well, hmm Gary did add alot but you won't have to change you guy all that much just edits of what is aready tere.

The shoes are bad, maybe if you angled the right(our left) foot up just alittle it wouldn't look weird. I like the sword due to its originality and it has gotten better since the first one. An eebrow wouldn't hurt either. I suppose he is mad due to the fact he is fighting so add one that is angled with his eye(look at attachement). Oh and the hand that is up in the air look a tad too big for his wrist.
As for muscle, just add alittle outline for his pecs, even if he eats ramen noodles(which I love eating I have ate them I was about 8 also) he would still have little muscle from leraing how to handle a blade.

Hehehe maybe is a little much but he wanted clear honest critique. So I pointed out everything I though needed fixing.

[MrMister]

It depends... is it chili vomit? And are all the shampoo bottles full of hot sauce?

[coreystranick]

Originally posted by Gary

quote:

Originally posted by coreystranick Well, hmm Gary did add alot but you won't have to change you guy all that much just edits of what is aready tere. The shoes are bad, maybe if you angled the right(our left) foot up just alittle it wouldn't look weird. I like the sword due to its originality and it has gotten better since the first one. An eebrow wouldn't hurt either. I suppose he is mad due to the fact he is fighting so add one that is angled with his eye(look at attachement). Oh and the hand that is up in the air look a tad too big for his wrist. As for muscle, just add alittle outline for his pecs, even if he eats ramen noodles(which I love eating I have ate them I was about 8 also) he would still have little muscle from leraing how to handle a blade.

Hehehe maybe is a little much but he wanted clear honest critique. So I pointed out everything I though needed fixing.

True, I jsut think he is a bit surprised but all that you have found worng, I tired to help give him alittle bit more clear examples on some stuff that you hve said. If he puts your critque and some of my stuff together he could make a pretty good character.

[Gary]

Originally posted by coreystranick

quote:

Originally posted by Gary quote: Originally posted by coreystranick Well, hmm Gary did add alot but you won't have to change you guy all that much just edits of what is aready tere. The shoes are bad, maybe if you angled the right(our left) foot up just alittle it wouldn't look weird. I like the sword due to its originality and it has gotten better since the first one. An eebrow wouldn't hurt either. I suppose he is mad due to the fact he is fighting so add one that is angled with his eye(look at attachement). Oh and the hand that is up in the air look a tad too big for his wrist. As for muscle, just add alittle outline for his pecs, even if he eats ramen noodles(which I love eating I have ate them I was about 8 also) he would still have little muscle from leraing how to handle a blade. Hehehe maybe is a little much but he wanted clear honest critique. So I pointed out everything I though needed fixing.

True, I jsut think he is a bit surprised but all that you have found worng, I tired to help give him alittle bit more clear examples on some stuff that you hve said. If he puts your critque and some of my stuff together he could make a pretty good character.

Indeed he could. I say he should continue and make it better like this. It could be very good and also help him improve his skills for later projects.

[Archem]

Pff! I'd say that he's lucky that I wouldn't want to ever eat my own vomit. God knows I put in disgusting enough stuff as it is...