Rise of the Phoenix

[Yhtomitsu]

Hey all

My mates and I are starting a game we talked about about 3 years ago and I wanted your opion on the game.

    The world is in a state of war between the Dragons and the Phoenixs they are not allowed to directly attack each other so they use humans to do the fighting. When a Dragon give their power to the human, That Human immeadiatley gets immense power and the dragon goes in to the human creatign a half human, half Dragon creature. But when a Phoenix's give their powers o the human they only get a tiny bit of power and the phoenix dies but with a phoenix they come back after they die so they come back and give the human more power so in the end the Phoenix Human becomes more powerful than the Dragon human.

   Anyway The Game starts of with an ordinary human and he's sent to go get help from the Wizards of Ragsanok because the Gaurdian Empire (the Bad guys) are attacking the Alexandrian (the good guys) Outpost and they can't take them on their own and you meet many new people on the way and theres a huge twist to the story but I won't tell you that because that will ruin the whole story .

So please give your thoughs on this I've only started making the game so there wont be any screenshots just yet butill try to get some up as soon as possible


Thanks.

[Bhall]

Can you expalin some more why do the dragons and phoenix fight.What is the purpose of the war.And some info about the characters would be good.

EDIT:will there be a way to chose your side to fight for dragons or phoenix or no one.

[Yhtomitsu]

Yeah you will be able to choose which side your on. The Dragons and Phoenix are fighting because the dragons thinking they were superior wanted to calim the land as thier own and the only think stoping them was the phoenix's. Now for some aof the Characters: (names may change)

Name: Marcus Von Williams
Race:Human
Age: 19
Weapon: Long Sword
Bio: ONe of the main characters in Rise of the Phoenix. He's always calm and has a good sense of justice. He always obeys teh laws no matter what.

Name: Edward Coltrane
Race: Dwarf / Human
Age: 23
Weapon: Spear
Bio: A half dwarf, half human charatcer with the strength and the keep eye for treasure of a dwarf and the magic of a human. He's quick to make jugdement of people and this can often lead him into trouble.

Name: Lance Chambers
Race: Dragon / Human
Age: 18
Weapon: 2 longs Swords or a Claymore
Bio: The other main Character in the Game. He's quick to act doesn't like people who talk to much. prefers action. Loves to see the funny side to things.

 So thats just a few of the characters I havent fully made up the story line I hope you like the idea I tried to make it as original as possible. Please tell me what you think.

[SilverBlade]

The story is ok but don't make it too complicated. It's also a pluspoint that you can choose on whoes side your on.

[Yhtomitsu]

Ok not to comlicated got it nice and simple

[Moosetroop11]

Uh huh, the complicated bit is the phoenix giving power bit. It'll take skill to convey that.

[Daetyrnis]

I'd change the names 'Guardian Empire' and 'Alexandria'.
The Phoenix power-giving bit seems overly and unnecessaryly complicated, but it could work.  It's hard to judge the game though, as you have a brief overview of the beginning, no enemy (other than the opposing race, which is choice specific), and no graphic preview.

good luck. ^_^

[Revolution911]

Originally posted by Yhtomitsu
the Gaurdian Empire (the Bad guys) are attack the Alexandrian

Ahahahahaha.

[Yhtomitsu]

i finally got a few screen shots for the game one is of an interior and the other is the main city which i have to fix up but check them out and tell me what u think.

[Raen Ryong]

They're too small to see/analyse properly, but they appear to be very bare.

Any map should have decoration of some kind, something to fill the big spaces in the maps. If a map is proving hard to fill, make it smaller if there are absolutely massive spaces.

[Bhall]

Like Raen said they are too small plus empty.Try to fill them up a bit more with some details.You should chek others ppl screenshots from their game and see how they fill up the map.

[Yhtomitsu]

thanks for the comments ill try to improve them this is my first attempt at mapping so i need to what im doing wrong so thanks

[Yhtomitsu]

alright ive improved the inside one tell me what u think



http://img134.imageshack.us/img134/1060/improvedscreen1pu8.png

[Meiscool-2]

Better, but still very plain.

Try making it look more home-like.

Example:

EDIT: Here's one using almost the same chipset as you're using.

[Yhtomitsu]

wow your really good at this do u get all your chipsets from charas or do u make them your self and thanks for the info and your maps look cool