A small comic I made.

[Ephiam]

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Well, I know it's not the BEST artwork in the world.  However,  thought that I would try doing something different for a change.  I will have the second page up...maybe by...tomorrow sometime.  But for now, I'll just give the dialouge that occured during the little comic.


-------------------------------------1st Page script. (Since it was a tad messy)-----------------------
Man:  "There seems to be no word from him yet, sir!"

Man with glasses: "Keep trying...He is sure to answer. "

Man with glasses: "But then again....we still have hold of that little distraction...don't we?"
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Voice: "What distraction...?"

Man: "OH!, there you are!"

Long-haired man: ...
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Man with glasses: "Ah, Lance! we were just talking about you!"
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Lance: " And what for?"

Man with glasses: " Oh! nothing much....it's only a small job..."

Man with glasses: "You should be done rather quickly...."
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Well,  I'm all open for opinion's and comment's if anyone has any.  Thank's.



EDIT: Hmm...i can't seem to get the image showing.  Well..just click on the link at the very top of this post to see it.

[Almeidaboo]

Ah...Thing is...I canīt really see stuff. I canīt tell what's what and the scenario is all mixed with the characters and I canīt see stuff.

[Moosetroop11]

My advice would be to use less lines and do bold, stylised characters in a regular comic. This helps with clarity, recognition and drawing speed.

[Ephiam]

Thanks.  I'm trying my best to make it not so realish looking and have a cartoony feel.  However, that seems to be turning out rather bad .  Anywhoo...I'm trying to 'tidy' thing's up with the second page.....trying to make it more followable and readable.

[Dragoon de Sol]

Due to imageshack resizing the comic, I am unable to see much of the comments.

[Almeidaboo]

And make the sequence of frames more understandable too...

[Ephiam]

Thank's for the comment's though =D  At least these ones are helpfull and half-decent.  It's hard to continue whenno one seems to like what you doin =(

[Ephiam]

Hmm....well, here is the second page.  I know it's not as much..but I tried to make it look a tad better than the other one.  

[IMG]http://img152.imageshack.us/img152/8084/img005iv9.th.jpg

[DarkFlood2]

Work on your handwriting.


Please.

[Ephiam]

Well, I'm trying to do the other pages on the computer.  here is an example (which sucks horrible) of my first time trying to do it.

[IMG]http://img264.imageshack.us/img264/5290/img005wj1.th.jpg

[EXO Muffin]

That's cool, maybe you should hexadekachromize it on MS Paint, it'll make it much clearer. Also, can you make bios and such?

[Ephiam]

Yeah.  I shall soon give out the character bio's a such.  However, here is the third page...which I'm sure I posted...but meh, here it is:

http://img148.imageshack.us/img148/1666/comicpage3ft6.th.jpg

[Almeidaboo]

Okay, hereīs the deal: you got 2 traces there:  darker one and a lighter one. In my conception of good drawing, these canīt coexist except in painting.

Do you gotta decide: or you use all the traces dark and defined or you do everything lighter, cause otherwise everything seems to be dirty!

[EXO Muffin]

See what I mean?:
Plus; it's easier to color on the computer once it's hexadekachromized, then just convert it to a gif, and you can add more color.

[EXO Muffin]

Hey, if you want me to color your comic, I will. Here's a sample: