My Sprites

[Mikado]

i swear to god guys seriously, ur taking it way off base man! obviously i'm a fighter! Mikado as ti said in the first comic, he's convicted of killing over a hundred ppl! as the story progresses you keep on knowing more and more about him! thats what builds a plot in the first place, he has to kill them all off to suvive in that tournament......brolly and the others were randomly picked by the announcer who he thought could kill off mikado but sadly he was wrong, and again as the story progresses mikado notices strange powers happening! (as you can see in the story, these comics are based off of your imagination so you can think what he is thinking!, so if he has a random blast you can think o......how did he do that or sumthin like dat) you don't have to say it to show it!  

[Ace of Spades]

The story would be good. But no offense, it's just boring looking at scenes of people fight. You need to apply that plot to the comic. It would be good, just put the plot into the story and don't make it all fighting scenes like a video game. Oh yeah, and please don't post gun smiles for no reason.

[Revolution911]

Originally posted by Mikado
i swear to god guys seriously, ur taking it way off base man! obviously i'm a fighter! Mikado as ti said in the first comic, he's convicted of killing over a hundred ppl! as the story progresses you keep on knowing more and more about him! thats what builds a plot in the first place, he has to kill them all off to suvive in that tournament......brolly and the others were randomly picked by the announcer who he thought could kill off mikado but sadly he was wrong, and again as the story progresses mikado notices strange powers happening! (as you can see in the story, these comics are based off of your imagination so you can think what he is thinking!, so if he has a random blast you can think o......how did he do that or sumthin like dat) you don't have to say it to show it!  

WHY COULDENT U PUT ALL THAT IN YOUR COMIC! geez! its ALL FIGHTING FRAMES! fighting frames SUCK! make original characters. apperently all the comics (as you say) are connected.....howin the hell does he go from pointing a gun at zombies, tofighting brolly, to changing into a completely different sprite! i know NOTHING about him! all ur doing is making a bunch of fighting frames.

[Mikado]

the shooting zombie thing was my fist attemp at a story comic, it has nothing to do with the other comic, and if i put that plot in thier then you'll say "o y did u put the plot that takes up a frame it's all so very boring and bla bla bla!"

[SnakeIzeGambit]

u dont fill in a whole frame with the plot. u simply tell(write) what's going on in each frame(preferably along the bottom).
take bits and pieces of the plot and use it like a comic book would.

[Red Giant]

Originally posted by Mikado
the shooting zombie thing was my fist attemp at a story comic, it has nothing to do with the other comic, and if i put that plot in thier then you'll say "o y did u put the plot that takes up a frame it's all so very boring and bla bla bla!"

If you don't accept critisism, how can you improve?
Look, when I go to see a kung-fu movie, I don't want fighting filling every single second.
When i complained about the story, the point was that you've made no changes. Whatsoever. If you want a plot in there, it needs to be told through the characters, through events, not just a bit of text because you have made basically no changes.
You explained all that stuff in your above posts, but for craps sake, we didn't know that. Go read a real comic book or something, see how its done.

[Mikado]

look i can take a critisism as much as the next person, but if its the same crap over and over then forget it, i meen if one person already established that then there is no need to repeat it, instead tell me OTHER! critisims other than the same thing!

[GhostClown]

Originally posted by Mikado
look i can take a critisism as much as the next person, but if its the same crap over and over then forget it, i meen if one person already established that then there is no need to repeat it, instead tell me OTHER! critisims other than the same thing!

Ok, just calm down. Don't even pay attention to them.

[SnakeIzeGambit]

i told u wut u needed to do to improve. take my advice or dont. its ur comic so u can leave it as it is if u wish(and rite now it sux)


ppl wouldnt need to repeat the same stuff if u took wut the first one said into account and changed wut was wrong.

[Revolution911]

look man u gotta tell the story as the events progress....

[Osmose]

Okay. Prepost warning - forget everything everyone has said in this thread. Consider ONLY what I am saying.

Now welcome to Moose's Comic Seminair. I am your host, Moose. Please sit down and get some paper, and a pen. Be ready to take notes.

The first rule of making sprite comics is length. If the punchline can't be reached within four or so frames, then the comic isn't worth writing. If need be, you can extend the comic a bit, but going too long just makes it boring.

Next, the best comics start with NO story. Trust me, you will develop some sort of overlying mission, but story should be secondary towards the humor.

Now, you justify your numerous fighting frames by saying "He's a fighting guy! Didn't you see that he was once convicted of killing 100 men? That means it's going to be a fighting comic!" Well, tough luck, a comic about fighting, and just fighting, is kinda boring. Supplement the fighting with talking and jokes.  

But before we can figure any of this out, you need to find a way to frame your comics. A bunch of backgrounds messily arranged on a white bg is REALLY ugly and unprofessional working.

The first step is estimating the size of your comic, and resizing the pic to that size. Next, find the background you'll be using. Be SURE that all frames are of the same size. Bigger or smaller frames can be added by using a diagonal black line or spreading a frame over the space of two frames, but it's a lot better to keep the size constant.

If you need to resize a background, like when changing backgrounds, consider not resizing, but instead, cutting a portion of the new background. You'll lose some of the background, but it would look better. But resizing is sometimes allowable.

Next is your speech bubbles. Try to make a universal speech bubble you can just copy and paste. That works. And also, NO NARRATION LIKE IN YOUR OTHER COMICS. Once again makes the comic boring.

So now, you've got your comic all set up, with the pretty black border. Final checklist:

1.Does it have the comic title, author, number, and obligitory funneh quote ABOUT the comic(a second punchline usually)?
2.Does it look like a pro did it?
3.Is the joke funny? And not just to you, but look at it from the outside. Would a random person from nowhere find it funny?
4.Does the comic make sense? Don't refer TOO much to past comics, try to make it so someone could pick up from where you are. This rule can be thrown out later when your comic becomes successful enough, but it's good to let the audience just jump in.

I might have missed a few points, but this will vastly improve any comic. Try it.

[SnakeIzeGambit]

there are more than just humorous comics moose boy. i think mikado should let us kno if its an action comic book (i.e. X-Men) or a comical comic strip.

[Mikado]

ok....well i made another attemp to make a story action! comic! i'm going to tell you the story first, then i'll show u the sprites after the story is shown, how about that do you think it'l work or not?

[SnakeIzeGambit]

isnt that wut u were doing b4?

[Mikado]

Introduction: THE BEGINNING

     Masenko D. Mikado brother of his arrogent but succesful sibling, Duaragon C. Mikado. Masenko was a great fighter aswell as Mikado, they were a great team until they came across a man named Jin Kutegouwa, a well known buisness man that would kill anyone if he did get what he wanted, he had told the brothers to retreive a sword for him since Jin had heard the rumor that Masenko and Mikado were the best fighting team. The brothers had no choice but to accept, the next night they retrieved it, but Masenko was way to geedy to just give up the sword for he knew what great power lies in the blade, it has said that who ever weilded the blade was granted enhanced stealth, strength, and speed making the weilder invincible, but in return you must for fill its lust for human blood, if not then it will feed on yours. Mikado was 19 and Masenko 20. When Masenko realized how powerful Jin was.....it was to late!( after your done reading this boring thing you can look at the intro comic thing!)